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Martie
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0 posted 2002-05-16 03:15 PM



She was as graceful
               as the sway of pond moss
Quiet
      as dusk
               falling across the canyon

Her breath
       moved the yellow wall of mustard  
              
She was covered with shivered listening

Not only the grass sighed when she was gone  

[This message has been edited by Martie (05-16-2002 03:16 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-05-16 03:17 PM


love this imagery here! Wonderful!
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2 posted 2002-05-16 03:18 PM



Now wouldn't any creature
want to be as graceful as
this well written heartsong

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3 posted 2002-05-16 03:26 PM


Ahhh, Martie, very gentle smile... this one was breathtaking..You weaved a story with so few words...
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4 posted 2002-05-16 03:52 PM


Beautiful picture your words have painted, Martie. *S* I like this very much.
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5 posted 2002-05-16 04:03 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, your imagery always makes me smile, this is a gorgeous depiction of a surreal waterfall! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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6 posted 2002-05-16 09:52 PM


another gorgeous write, from your magic pen.
I loved this one, Martie.

~magic hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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7 posted 2002-05-16 10:13 PM


Martie, you know I love it....
Loved it before I read it...
Because, it said you wrote it.  
Wonderful imagery here dear poetess.
~Hugs~


~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~


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8 posted 2002-05-16 10:43 PM


My mother will be honored at this stirring tribute
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9 posted 2002-05-17 12:58 PM


Thank god yr here Martie -- yr words make time worth it. If that made sense.... (it did t' me)

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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10 posted 2002-05-17 01:10 AM


Your gentle words stir the reader and force them to pause!  You're a true poet Martie!
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11 posted 2002-05-17 10:17 AM


MartieSis~

Delicate, delicate, delciate~

*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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12 posted 2002-05-17 04:00 PM


Absolutely breathtaking in its imagery. Beautiful write!
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13 posted 2002-05-17 05:31 PM


Beautiful Martie!
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14 posted 2002-05-17 05:39 PM


Well done, Martie...
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