Open Poetry #20 |
Porcelain Purge |
Melodie Morningstarr Junior Member
since 2002-05-09
Posts 16Toronto, ON, Canada |
Porcelain Purge Hurling into the shower, screaming until the water ran cold, with betrayal, shock and hopelessness bouncing off the cheshire walls returning to coat me in my accusations. Kneeling on the hard tile, I turn inside out as droplets scathe cheeks with stains of how and why, unanswered pelted by tepid streams and soaked realities matching the sobbing outpour of aimless rivers. Lava tears burn fury trails down vacant breasts in shiver, feeble, I slide to the floor in exhausted acceptance watching pellets play upon defeated fingers, beading and rolling, moisture drops itching along the white walls of my skin. Promises swirl down the drain of steady porcelain rain licking in folds of curve, a soothing beat upon my back calming with wet caress surrounding salty remembrance that washes you away. Melodie Marie Morningstarr original 1998 revised 2002 previously posted at the Starlite Cafe [This message has been edited by Melodie Morningstarr (05-09-2002 11:16 PM).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Kneeling on the hard tile, I turn inside out as droplets scathe cheeks with stains of how and why, unanswered" WOW!!!! explosive, emotional entrance! Excellent first post.... WELCOME!! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is excellent, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, this shouts with such angst and intensity, this is a fabulous first post! BRAVO!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet Melodie, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! (big hugggsssssss) I can't wait to read more of your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so uch! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Pretty intense imagery here, Melodie. I have many thoughts about this poem, not all of which I'm ready to discuss yet. The imagery is striking. Welcome to Passions. I look forward to reading more poetry from you. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
hey there this is some outstanding poetry! Welcome to the passions family |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Melodie,I believe I live in the way you wrote about. This is so emotional but a very incredible write. Such talent! Welcome! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Melodie, this is indeed a very profound entree to our hallowed Passionate walls. I look forward to reading more of your work. Welcome to our humble poetic abode... Check your email for a special greeting.. A Simile is as easy as pie, but a Metaphor is a piece of cake ~*~ Nancy Ness |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
WOW Wish I could write like you. I'm totally embarassed Very intense and captivating Filled with emotion Applause here! Liz |
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Melodie Morningstarr Junior Member
since 2002-05-09
Posts 16Toronto, ON, Canada |
I'm much obliged to you all for embracing my amateur attempts at poetry, thank you! and thanks to Nan for the poetry greeting card, you've certainly made me feel welcome! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! Very profound first post! I look forward to more of your writing. ~Hugs, Nancy~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well hello my fellow Canadian ~ Welcome to Passions!!! 'Profound, raw' and 'exceptional' doesn't even do this poem justice, this is beyond excellent writing. I can really 'feel' the pain, struggle and hope in this. You've made quite the impressive entrance with this piece. Take care, Melissa "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Welcome to Passions Melodie!! Great writing here!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Melodie, not many write as well as this for a first post. Superbly written poem. Welcome to Passions.... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Welcome to Passions, Melodie... Your first post was certainly very thought provoking and powerful... I am looking forward to reading more of your work. ~welcoming hugs Lyra |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You came across very strong, pointed, and with a tremendous amount of feeling. Looking forward to seeing more from you! Welcome to Passions! Karilea |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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