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Card's Dark Side
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Card's Dark Side |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Card’s Dark Side In her gilt of golden thread At her table, she held her stead Flushed a shuffle of card in hand “Show me the future” was his demand She turned a lady, a Queen of Heart He waited silent, a good start She turned a Jack, Knave in black Laid him on lady, began to stack No numbers showed the hours spent Face cards only, the gaming went His demand, to see prospects And she held all in circumspect Her hands were fine, she trembled not As by his eyes, her gaze was caught In her silence she dealt the cards And with each flick, he swallowed hard Too soon, his life was dealt She dared not ask him how he felt And he, but with a moan gone cry Couldn’t stand, although he’d try “Could it be as it is so?” She nodded yes, the cards did know That his life had been foreseen By the woman in his dreams Before his eyes, he eyed the Queen The darker Jack, the Knave of Dreams |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A very unique writing style compliments the visions you are trying to relay to the reader, well done. We should spend less time on worrying when our life is going to end and more on when it's going to start! [This message has been edited by Mysteria (05-09-2002 03:34 PM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Very cool write! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
me Elan seems she is the player with her cards tempting a willing fate? naughty romance. it is fun to read such.. and in looking the picture that mysteria placed...I finally know what a lady foot looks like when they take off those 5' heels...grin |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Elan darling girl this was as usual for you utterly utterly wonderful. The style is pure you, breathtakingly lovely and the execution is without doubt one of your finest ever. Your fine handiwork is in this utterly stunningly lovely piece of utter wonder. Truly outstanding writing   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
"Dark Jack- Knave of Dreams" Well struck with branding aglow marked in contrast but only in the mark burns the soul out unremitting and the eys go blind in I to dark Well done EH |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
élan~ wow, how ominous! You paint a very vivid scene with perfect rhyme, I enjoyed. *hugs* ~Krista  Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Elan, very interesting story you told here.. or is that 'foretold'?  Well done! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is hauntingly wonderful, sweet friend, I too feel squirmish reading this just thinking if tarot readers really could unearth the darkest secrets of everyones future! (sigh) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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