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Elan
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State of Wide Eye

0 posted 2002-05-09 11:10 AM


Card’s Dark Side

In her gilt of golden thread
At her table, she held her stead
Flushed a shuffle of card in hand
“Show me the future” was his demand

She turned a lady, a Queen of Heart
He waited silent, a good start
She turned a Jack, Knave in black
Laid him on lady, began to stack

No numbers showed the hours spent
Face cards only, the gaming went
His demand, to see prospects
And she held all in circumspect

Her hands were fine, she trembled not
As by his eyes, her gaze was caught
In her silence she dealt the cards
And with each flick, he swallowed hard

Too soon, his life was dealt
She dared not ask him how he felt
And he, but with a moan gone cry
Couldn’t stand, although he’d try

“Could it be as it is so?”
She nodded yes, the cards did know
That his life had been foreseen
By the woman in his dreams

Before his eyes, he eyed the Queen
The darker Jack, the Knave of Dreams


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Mysteria
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1 posted 2002-05-09 12:12 PM


A very unique writing style compliments the visions you are trying to relay to the reader, well done.


We should spend less time on worrying when our life is going to end and more on when it's going to start!


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Duncan
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2 posted 2002-05-09 12:18 PM


Very cool write!
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-05-09 12:43 PM


me Elan
seems she is the player
with her cards
tempting a willing fate?

naughty romance.
it is fun to read such..

and in looking the picture that mysteria placed...I finally know what a lady foot looks like when they take off those 5' heels...grin

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4 posted 2002-05-09 02:37 PM


Elan darling girl this was as usual for you utterly utterly wonderful. The style is pure you, breathtakingly lovely and the execution is without doubt one of your finest ever. Your fine handiwork is in this utterly stunningly lovely piece of utter wonder. Truly outstanding writing


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


EternitysHorizon
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5 posted 2002-05-11 03:41 AM


"Dark Jack- Knave of Dreams"
Well struck with branding aglow
marked in contrast
but only in the mark
burns the soul out unremitting
and the eys go blind in I to dark

Well done
EH

SmittenKitten
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6 posted 2002-05-11 08:15 AM



élan~ wow, how ominous!  You paint a very vivid scene with perfect rhyme, I enjoyed.

*hugs*
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

Enchantress
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7 posted 2002-05-11 08:58 AM


Elan, very interesting story you told here..
or is that 'foretold'?
Well done!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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8 posted 2002-05-11 09:28 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is hauntingly wonderful, sweet friend, I too feel squirmish reading this just thinking if tarot readers really could unearth the darkest secrets of everyones future! (sigh) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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