Open Poetry #20 |
Subliminal |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Subliminal Shadows of shape shifting marrow Ride on the point of the arrow. Speeding into destinies goal Through the door of my open soul And a tiger waits at the gate Showing the fangs of my fate. Blended in with the weeds and reeds Waiting for the sound of my needs. Where the hunter is the hunted And the psyche’s worn and blunted Blinded by the rays of the gold The oldest story ever told. Circles continue on their way Forever in forever’s day Ground and worn, the sands of hours In the flows of shifting powers And time has grown a lilies face Where yesterday daffodils grace. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully visual Sy ... excellent description throughout, and carried by your ever flowing rhythmic rhyme ... just wonderful! PS ... check your mail ... Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour my dearest friend, darling man OH MY STARS this is incredible writing utterly soul drenching beautification of the spirit. I love it I love it utterly this is truly superb writing. This is so totally perfect, the rhyme the meter the flow, all connect to make this an utterly utterly fabulous piece of writing. You know somewhere there’s a law that forbids you from always being so superior to everyone ese. So you must stop stealing the stars to illume your writing, you must stop dipping your think in the well of rainbow’s ink and you must halt in your ceaseless quest to be the best. But if you don’t I will still adore you and your wonderful writing Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sy, real magic in this enjoyed the images and the suggestions |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
message sent on soft cat's feet wakes me in the morn to greet and I, I wake upon your wiles to walk with you those many miles |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Thank you for the beautiful, yes you are. And thanks again for the sweet Email. Marsha, You have outdone yourself. And now I'm in love with myself. LOL Dark Stranger, Then you enjoyed it all. Thank you. Sunshine, Can't top your reply. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Seymour, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I always love the intensity and imagery you give your poems and this is no exception! (big hugggsssss) May you always run for your destiny and outsprint the tiger, sweet friend, this is fabulous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you for always dropping in and reading my stuff. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love this one, Sweet Sy.. It's not so subliminally introspective - What a great metaphor... Check your email again, Okie Dokie??.. And thank you soooooo much for that wonderful gift - I shall treasure it always... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful morning read Sy... Great rhythm and flow. ~Morning Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, You welcome sweet. I'll check the mail after this. Enchantress, Thank you for dropping by and reading me. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And a tiger waits at the gate Showing the fangs of my fate. Blended in with the weeds and reeds Waiting for the sound of my needs. Where the hunter is the hunted And the psyche's worn and blunted Blinded by the rays of the gold The oldest story ever told. Circles continue on their way Forever in forever's day Ground and worn, the sands of hours In the flows of shifting powers And time has grown a lilies face Where yesterday daffodils grace. ================================== Randy came to me wearing wings of worry said he fears you're feeling your age I told him you carry the wisdom of your years and the words must be put to page by gifted pen of sage I told him theres no need to worry ... told him that tiger has a rude awakening in store I reminded him a tiger turns into a pussycat ... once hes heard Sy's Randy Dragon roar. *winkiewinkie* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy I have faught with time my best til tired out in need of rest yet time's so nonchalant, you know it leaves before the afterglow Enjoyed your poem! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Your constant lift keeps me flying. Thank you sweet you are a constant treat. Just love Ya. WW Randy Stinky. Martie, Ant that the truth. Enjoyed your comment. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Where the hunter is the hunted And the psyche’s worn and blunted Blinded by the rays of the gold The oldest story ever told. Very cool poem, Sy...especially liked this verse. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
When you feel the weary and the wear, surround yourself with those who care. A gentle heart will hold you dear, so rest your head when friends are near. ((hugs to you)) and I also thank you for the absolutely beautiful "scribbles" lol, and will treasure them always. We should spend less time on worrying when our life is going to end and more on when it's going to start! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan, Thank you for the read and the cool. Sharon, I'll take your advice, thank you and your welcome. |
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