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Freedom of the Fair Maiden
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Freedom of the Fair Maiden |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Silently she rode into the night bloodied from the battle waged freedom flowed around her head She rode, no longer caged He held her heart in captivity assuming she would acquiesce he planned to enslave her there as the object of his caress His soured breath lingered where his lips found her cheek she swooned, thinking quickly leading him to think her weak Then with the strength of Angels she pushed hard and knocked him down then running out the castle door in nothing but her nightgown She stole the stallion from the barn riding past the hedge on the lane with one glance back, she found deliverance only bravery could attain |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Very cool...next chapter? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
YES!!! I need a STALLION!!!! exquisite story here, and this type of tale happens to be your forte'! I wish you would repost some of your Goddess work as well. *shaking my head* You are so quiet sometimes I forget you pack a punch with the pen too! Loved this, love you.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent...one of my favorites...James |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
BRAVO!!! excellent writing, very visual and interesting, enjoyed very much ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Every fair maiden should heed her call.. A free maiden is a happy one... Nice write, PdV.. I like it.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Yes, yes, oh Sharon, to me I saw this as a poem of how women are always taken advantage of unfairly and how one woman had the strength to say "No, I've had enough, I've got to get away!" and following her heart! YES!!! I love it, sweet friedn, this is excellent, my heart goes out to all who are affected by this and I only wish we could all love with heart and sincerity, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, Can't wait for the next chapter. Love Sy |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sharon darling girl excellent writing I love this it’s so well formed the image speaking and alive, very well done   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind comments!!! I'm slowly working myself out of a writing slump and this was a 'test'!! I'm so glad you liked it.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sharon I am a teacher...you passed the test, not only that, you get an A for bravery! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I really like when you write in this vein. . . it's so. . . you. . . great work. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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LRbaba Junior Member
since 2002-05-07
Posts 30Dallas, Texas, |
very smooth devine i'm a sucker for knights and castles |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yanno...I've known a bunch of "Maidens"...and most seem very unfair to me?....I know you know your Bible...right?...Yanno when Eve ate the apple they became embarrassed about their bodies and covered themselves with fig leaves...I used to import and export small animals and reptiles....two girls lived next to me and used to cook me meals all the time....we had this old crab apple tree in the back yard and this snake died, I put it over one of the limbs to freak out the girls at our barbecue....the girls saw it, and indeed freaked out...I said;, What the hell, the snake's dead, the apples back...lets get out of these damn clothes...ya wanna?...Well, this is a perfect example of 'unfair" maidens...they declined |
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