Fixing Me (Metaphorically)

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Open Poetry #20

Fixing Me (Metaphorically)

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2002-05-03 11:59 PM

My stomach braids
in twisted knots

Your fingers:

heartless scavengers
coursing through my pain
nibbling at my defense

I cry and you brush
harder through the knots
My red puffy cheeks illicit
even more ruthless wrath
"Fixing Me":
an important task to you

The sinew stretches
The sutures break
Water and blood
on separate
paths

At one foot
a puddle of life
at the other
a plague of death

But its ok...
there's plastic underneath

awake amongst a searing light
eyes mute what should cause pain
a woman in a nightmare gown
holds black and dying brain

a mass of meat and organs lay
for hungry beasts to dine
and metal sheathes my body now
I do adore the shine

I often sit and wonder how
This rhyme should flow so free
I thank the god that came along
Who fixed the wrong in me

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

1 posted 2002-05-06 01:56 AM

dark and rife with some good imagery, and still, i liked the following the best:

But its ok...
there's plastic underneath

can't understand why this is buried with nothing. your writing appeals to me muchly these days walt

Chris

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2002-05-06 08:39 PM

This is a departure for you Walt. I'm glad to see you stretching your poetic muscle. I like this.

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

3 posted 2002-05-06 08:59 PM

Just a lil country saying.."Don't fix what isn't broken"..Enjoyed you as always. There is only one Walt.

Sincerely,
Reg

cruz
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since 2000-07-18

Posts 282
Dallas,Texas USA

4 posted 2002-05-07 12:01 PM

intensely graphic! i especially like the following,

water and blood on separate paths...

a mass of meat and organs lay
for hungry beasts to dine
and metal sheathes my body now
I do adore the shine...

and

a woman in a nightmare gown
holds black and dying brain

awesome write...

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