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David2
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since 2000-03-22

Posts 407

0 posted 2002-05-03 04:04 PM

You

The emptiness the lonely heart conceals
Perpetuates the life sustaining drive
To wallow in romanticized ideals
Of honest love to keep faint hopes alive.
But someone, somewhere, hopes, and dreams and waits
To know someday the undiscovered you,
And knowing you to satisfy your fates
While claiming full contentment overdue.
When last you meet the one your soul so craves,
You'll find your richest fantasies surpassed.
With guilt resolved you'll kneel as passion's slaves,
Released from false restraints that plagued the past.

The lustre of imagination's lure
Must pale when love is honest, true and pure.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

1 posted 2002-05-03 06:30 PM

A sonnet with a bite. I like the idea of an "undiscovered you."

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2002-05-03 06:35 PM

Well done - enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-05-03 09:35 PM

BRAVO!!! This is so very well-said, sweet friend, sometimes at first we really don't know ourselves, but as we escape our camouflage and grow on, we learn the true virtues of love we find a treasure to share! (sigh) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-05-03 09:42 PM

Very nicely done!
Enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

5 posted 2002-05-03 09:45 PM

I have read this passage
but three times
a little slower
to taste the rhyme
a little faster
with skip of heart
I like the thought
your words impart...

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

6 posted 2002-05-04 02:16 AM

David
Oh, how I have missed your writings
This is superb, as I knew it would be, and so beautiful your thoughts.
Liz

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