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Marge Tindal
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0 posted 2002-05-03 01:02 AM


If I Didn't Know Better
(I'd Swear I Was Doreen)
~*Marge Tindal*~

I swear if the last 34 hours NEVER repeats
I'll be the happiest camper you'd ever meet
Started out with a cautious move
turned into a disaster of rising proportions
Bird-condo cage moved down the steps with ease
washed it out ... pretty as you please
Birds all happy with the extra shower
would blow their cover within the hour~

To load it in the car
would take muscled-finesse
I could do it myself
NO STRESS
Pull and tug ... tight fit it seems
then the darned thing slipped
from my grip
tumbling over in rapid careen
Door flew open ... birds in scatter
Six flew over the Cuckoo's nest
coming to rest
in the tops of 40 ft. trees
with ease~

Oh NO !  Come back !
Please cut me a little slack
Flitter flatter
Love Birds and others in scatter
Out across the Swamp they went
Lickety-split ... about in flit~

Me in cry (literally)
of sad goodbyes
My birds ... my birds
whatever will I do ?
I whistled and shouted
and called them by name
TrickyVicky and Poppie
Dwight and Reba
Come back here now
Rainbow and Kiwi !

Cavorting the branches
in short freedom flights
I know I must have been
a terrible sight
In tears running around amuck
perhaps they thought I was a freaking duck~

First one back to the yard
is so precious to me
My very own little
TrickyVicky~
One long night,
with not much hope in my mind
that they'd return
even if they knew how to~

Clever me ... I set up the cage
and filled the food and water bins
Propped the door open and waited
for I could hear their songs again

On the earliest morning sun
there I was, again on the run
Looking and searching
with all my might
Just where does a bird go
into the night ?

Poppie was next to spy me
out in the yard
She plopped down beside me
the freedom too hard~
She sighed with relief
as I placed her in
a cage that was waiting
for my feathered friend~

A bird in the hand
is worth two in the tree
So I commanded ...
get down here to me !
And in flew Rainbow
as if she just 'knew'
that Marge was-In-Charge
of this bounty hunter deed
I placed her inside
with the water and seed~

Digging up plants
so I'd be near
Just in case the others
were waiting to hear
the dinner bell
(well, who can tell ?)
It worked as two more flew home~
Into that open cage door
they glided so free
And started to eat
with the greatest of glee~

Yep, by golly
Kiwi and Dwight came home
That only left Reba still on the roam
Dwight was sure his mate was near
so he sang his heart out
so she could hear~

The sun in set
hasn't brought her home yet
but, with thoughts from friend, June
and sweet MartieSis too
It's amazing what a little prayer can do~
I'm hoping perhaps on early sunrise
I'll find Reba waiting
with hungry eyes~

And June did the neatest thing
she sent GOD an e-mail (she did too !)
Who'd have thought such a thing ?
Oh sure it came back with the standard barage
of gibberish attempt at some intentioned garbage -
=======================================================
Subj: Returned mail: User unknown
Date: 05/02/2002 1:47:44 AM Eastern Daylight Time
From: MAILER-DAEMON@aol.com
To: Deejunebug@aol.com
Sent from the Internet (Details)
The original message was received at Thu, 2 May 2002 01:47:21 -0400 (EDT)
from root@localhost
----- The following addresses had permanent fatal errors -----NOT!!!

----- Transcript of session follows -----
... while talking to mail.slmsoft.com.:
>>> RCPT To:
<<< 550 5.1.1 ... User unknown (Boy...Shows you what AOL knows)!!!
550 ... User unknown Thought everyone knew who GOD is...
Final-Recipient: RFC822; GodNHeaven@milkyway.com
Action: failed (I don't think so)!!!
Status: 5.1.1
Remote-MTA: DNS; mail.slmsoft.com
Diagnostic-Code: SMTP; 550 5.1.1 ... User unknown (hello)!!!
Last-Attempt-Date: Thu, 2 May 2002 01:47:36 -0400 (EDT) Don't worry...He got it...I just know He did...*Ü*
Received: from Deejunebug@aol.com
by imo-r04.mx.aol.com (mail_out_v32.5.) id 6.132.d36df84 (24899)
for ; Thu, 2 May 2002 01:47:21 -0400 (EDT)
Return-path:
From: Deejunebug@aol.com
Message-ID: <132.d36df84.2a022ce1@aol.com>
Date: Thu, 2 May 2002 01:47:13 EDT
Subject: Just a little bitty Prayer...
To: GodNHeaven@milkyway.com
MIME-Version: 1.0
Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="part1_132.d36df84.2a022ce1_boundary" Heaven has NO boundary!!!
X-Mailer: AOL 7.0 for Windows US sub 10500
Dear God,
I hope you get this soon...
I have a very special friend, who has a heart of Gold,
and the gentle loving kindness of a Angel...
who has a very heavy heart tonight.
She is longing for the return of her little feathered 'soul mates'.
Please keep them safe through the night in your loving hands
and guide them safely home at mornings light.
Please help to lift my friends aching heart...give it wings again...please grant it flight.
She is soul heavy with sorrows of other matters, as well...just the thought of this loss
is almost something too heavy for someone so weary to bear...
Please hear her prayers tonight...may they reach your listening ear...
may she have the happiness returned that she so freely gives to others.
Love you Dear God...
Me
PS...I hope you'll find this little bitty prayer, as well.

=========================================================
Friends, is this not the sweetest thing
that ever your heart has seen ?
And God MUST get his e-mail ....
he brought five out of six birds home
*Waiting for Reba* who's out alone
Isn't that just like a star ?
Wanting to make a grand entrance~

OKay ... but that's my story
and I'm stuck with it~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

© Copyright 2002 Marge Tindal - All Rights Reserved
Magicmystery
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1 posted 2002-05-03 01:44 AM


OMG (no pun intended), Marge, It took me 10 minutes to read this!!!! you've out done yourself here.  I absolutely loved it!!!! I could see that you have been working on this one for a while. All I have to say is  WOW!!!!
I have to stop laughing now... I love your wit.
gonna have to save this one for further library visits.

Sherry

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

[This message has been edited by Magicmystery (05-03-2002 01:47 AM).]

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2 posted 2002-05-03 01:45 AM


ROFLMAO...if you knew how many times I'd just thought this title!!!! chuckling here...

it's why we call each other, lucy and harpo yanno...from that episode of I love lucy, when lucy and harpo marx mimic each other as if a mirror....grin

And truly...this is beautiful, marge...and hey, if God is everywhere? WHY SHOULDN'T SHE HAVE AN E MAIL ADDY????

Larry C
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3 posted 2002-05-03 04:40 AM


Marge,
I'm thrilled you got so lucky. Hope Reva comes to her senses! Best of luck, looks like you should resend that email...

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2002-05-03 05:42 AM



Reva, you better come back to your Mom now, or I'll spank your little behind, leaving her in such stress!!!

As always Marge, though I know you're in distress, I can't help giggling here, thinking of you carrying that cage down to your car.

Hope the little thing will return soon to you.

Special knuffels to you.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Sunshine
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5 posted 2002-05-03 07:09 AM



I can SEE you...and your birds, the whole vision...

and this whole story makes this site all that more Human in compassion and understanding...

Hugs to you, and all the birds!

Marsha
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6 posted 2002-05-03 07:30 AM


Margie girl darling sister of my heart, Oh my sweet Lord, this was utterly utterly wonderful, not the loss of Reba, but the way you painted the whole picture with such ease. I swear I could feel the frustration, the worry, the delight, I could see the birds each one of them flying off then returning. Absolutely fantastic writing as always you have written the whole episode in perfect detail.

I hope Reba returns very very soon, and the Email was perfect, such a wonderful thought from June for you.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

     
  

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2002-05-03 08:11 AM


*Thanks to each of you for enjoying the angst of me ~
This was an adventure I DON'T want to repeat~

As of morning light, Reba hasn't chosen to return to the cage ... but, she is hovering close by ... so maybe she'll come home yet~

If you all don't see me for a few days, don't be surprised ... I'm still moving and will now transport the birdies to their new home ... yesterday's episode set me back a day or two.

Love you ALL~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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2dalimit
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8 posted 2002-05-03 08:30 AM


I hope you catch Reba soon. We had three parakeets escape and two returned. Your adventure sounds almost like ours. Enjoyed the write.

Thanks,
Melton

doreen peri
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9 posted 2002-05-03 08:42 AM


it was

YOU !!



i KNEW it was somebody around here!!!! you ARE ME!!!! you stole my identity, took me away from myself and made words of mine come out of your mouth!!!! goddammit!!! i can't BELIEVE this!!! you have got a LOT of nerve, lady!!!

yer an identity thief!!! and the whole time i was blaming the sereneOne!!! hey, i don't take things like this lightly!!! i'm sending out the IDTHIEFPOLICE to take lock the Dor behind you!!!

psssstttttttt...... i know i tend to ramble, but i don't normally write pomes with email footers in them.... *wink

oh and.....

i'm glad you got yer birds back ....

but

GIMME BACK MY CREDIT CARDS!!!!



hehe.... great pome Marge, but you knew I'd like it, dintya? *grin

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10 posted 2002-05-03 08:45 AM


Ah Marge, this is priceless and I do hope Reba returns home....
Why wouldn't God have an email address?!
~Hugs~

Marge Tindal
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11 posted 2002-05-03 09:00 AM


Melton and Enchantress, thanks bunches~

Dor-who ?~

LOL ...
'psssstttttttt...... i know i tend to ramble, but i don't normally write pomes with email footers in them.... *wink'

You will ... you will !
Admit it ... you just hadn't thought of it yet~

Oh ... and the CREDIT CARDS are MAXED !

Yeah ... it had to have that title ... it just HAD to !

All I could think as I was penning this adventurous episode was DOREEN !!!!

I think maybe my next bird may have to sport that name ...
Oh, I'll get another 'talker' for sure~
LOL~
This day is promising to be a much more cheerful one ... sorry, just can't handle another Angst-for-Dor Day !

Love n' HUGS~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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SEA
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with you
12 posted 2002-05-03 09:23 AM


I hope she comes back to you!!
oh Marge, you made me laugh though...


"perhaps they thought I was a freaking duck~"
rofl and for the record, I like Dor's ramblings

Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2002-05-03 09:29 AM


you never cease to amaze me marge..
but that is a good thing

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14 posted 2002-05-03 10:06 AM


I don't read long works for the reason that it takes me forever to read them. DUH!
Now I'm glad I did

SmittenKitten
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15 posted 2002-05-03 10:30 AM



Poor Marge!  Warm hugs to you for your 'adventure'   I hope Reba is back in her cage as I type this.  If you want, I can send my kitties over to chase her back in?   

Keep smiling sweet poetess
*hugs*
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

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16 posted 2002-05-03 10:55 AM


Dearest Marge, I just knew there was going to be a poem in this experience...I could feel it coming, but wasn't expecting such a wonderful explosion.  Love to you!
Marge Tindal
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17 posted 2002-05-07 02:47 AM


SEA~
Well ... maybe I did get a 'little' carried away~  LOL~

DarkStranger~
Oh ... I'm amazingly blonde sometimes~

InterLoper~
Thanks fella~

SmittenKitten~
No return of Reba YET !
Now just WHERE ARE THOSE CATS ?? !!

Martie~
Sis ... thank you for holding my tears and for fully understanding~
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~

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18 posted 2002-05-10 11:06 AM


Oh, gal... from tears of laughter at your day going to pieces to heart tears at your loss and June's wonderful email... back to tears of laughter at maxed credit cards... you trying to sog my shoulders? LOL

I loved this... such vivid descriptions had the reader pushing the cage and searching for birds right along with you. *S* I hope so much Reba has returned to your love and care... if not, I hope she flutters her little feathers into someone else's life and heart. *S*

Now... would you like some doves? *G* The one nesting on my balcony is oblivious to the fact that her fat butt is squashing my flowers... and I guess I'm supposed to protect her and her offspring from my cats? LOL I KNOW I didn't put out a welcome mat or hang a "Dove Maternity Ward" sign! LOL

Marge Tindal
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19 posted 2002-05-14 09:26 PM


SweetSuthernGal~
Me little heart is not *smiling* ... Reba is still on the roam .... I've gone back to the SwampLand three times hoping ... hoping ... well, sometimes God deals us a teardrop ... I've shed mine and sweet friends like you have been here to share them with me~

Is June just the sweetest thing on earth, or what ?

Love you for thinking of me ...
LOVE YOU period !!!
*Hugs*
~*Me*~

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20 posted 2003-05-23 01:36 PM


Sitting here *giggling* at ME ...
and missing MzDoreen's poetry~
Reckon I'll just have to stroll over to her hideaway and take a new peek at her.
Lordy, how that gal could do the poetic ramble !!!!!!!!

Doreen ... you may not see this .... but I MISS YOU here !!!
I am eternally thankful that your reply is still here !  It's PRECIOUS to me !
*HUGLETS*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Marge Tindal
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21 posted 2003-11-26 01:10 AM


Just got the pure *giggle-schmiggles* re-reading my little disastrous episode~

It WAS a traumatic experience to be sure~
Reba never did come home ...
still on the swampland roam~

I KNOW DOREEN DOESN'T POST HERE ANYMORE ... BUT HER REPLY IS TOTALLY PRECIOUS TO ME !!!

DOREEN ... YOU MAY NEVER SEE THIS,
Unless....?
BUT I MISS YOU GIRLIE~

Happy Thanksgiving for whatever year you might get to read this~

*Huglets*
~*Marge-In-Charge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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