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Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2002-05-01 05:02 PM

when the rain finally stops coming down,
don't bring the sun out right away,
let me be wet for awhile
let the rain drip from the trees into puddles
       on the sidewalk for me to jump into
              and get my feet wet

let the clouds stay for just a while longer,
not dark and forboding,
but in lighter gray
       that feels better than it looks,
a blanket for my heart to cover itself in

I'm watching the rain bead on the grass,
flowing down the street and
       into the ground,
while an ant begins to set sail on a leaf
       for places of eternity

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-05-01 05:05 PM

a blanket for my heart to cover itself in

you are writing so wonderful lately Sven..and I love the ending *s

p.s. are you going to send anymore object challenges out or did that fizzle?

M

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-05-01 06:58 PM

Very cool. Like the ant at the end.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-05-01 07:21 PM

Sven, very enjoyable read.
Left me smiling at the end....nice thoughts.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

4 posted 2002-05-01 07:59 PM

The rain has washed off the dust from my heart. I think I'll join that ant and see where it takes us. How I've missed reading the PIP.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2002-05-01 08:17 PM

Sven, this is superbly visual...I wish I
were that ant....such a ride it would be...
Nicely done Sir...

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2002-05-01 08:19 PM

I'm watching the rain bead on the grass,
flowing down the street and
into the ground,
while an ant begins to set sail on a leaf
for places of eternity''

I love this, and how you have grown, you talent for writing does show...

Lauren~

~Sinking fast into
an ocean of you,
what if I told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

7 posted 2002-05-01 11:09 PM

This is just plain good. I like it.
-Dave

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

8 posted 2002-05-01 11:21 PM

Ah yes, the magic of the sven pen...I love this!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

9 posted 2002-05-02 12:06 PM

let the clouds stay for just a while longer,
not dark and forboding,
but in lighter gray
that feels better than it looks,

This is fantastic Sven~
Loved the sense of calm and the goodness that is left in the aftermath.

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

10 posted 2002-05-02 12:15 PM

Sven...
Your poem is filled with such splendid imagery...
I get a sense of calmNcomfort upon reading your poem...
Hugs2UdearPoetFriend
*~coco~*

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

11 posted 2002-05-02 04:36 PM

thank you all so very much. . . it's nice to see that you enjoy my work. . . my growth here is in no small part to all of you. . .and your comments and suggestions. . . thank you all for all of them. . . you're what keeps me going. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

12 posted 2002-05-03 08:38 AM

Hi Sven,

This is a treasure, completely enjoyed every word.

Love, Cerenity

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2002-05-05 04:52 AM

this is just too good

bump

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

14 posted 2002-05-05 09:49 AM

Let me be wet for awhile...

yes...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

15 posted 2002-05-05 10:04 AM

Sven,
Can't tell you how good you are getting my friend. Sy

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

16 posted 2002-05-05 10:09 AM

my friend,I loved it

As always enjoy reading your poems,sir

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

17 posted 2002-05-05 12:09 PM

love the image of the ant floating on a leaf...loved your words sven...hugs

~Victoria

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

18 posted 2002-05-06 02:54 PM

thank you all so much again. . . it's because of you that I grow and become better. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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