Open Poetry #20 |
She said |
bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Dressed the curtain with her shadow. Windows undone by her hands. Letting glass light fall to pieces. Sadness working through her glands. Set the pieces burning out. Fecund shudder of finality. Bony roses, goodbye glowly. Colors lit the unlit sky. Color turned to red-fed hunger. Color turned to blackly treescape. Color turned to blue-gold raincloud. Color turned, not much to say. Rain is falling on the flames. She said leave the pictures; keep the frames. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
You mind twists words in ways that leaves me speechless at times... I enjoy reading your work |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I felt heaviness while reading...like a weight on the chest. Your ending is awesome in its irony...So tell me, are all of these NEW? Impressive m'friend. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks everyone. And these are all brand-new. A nice day-to-day map of the craziness that is my head. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hey...twenty good bumps, deserves another. yer a nut and I love you. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
love and its disappointments "in and out of frame"..nicely rendered |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, everyone. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
This deserves another go |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Rain is falling on the flames. She said leave the pictures; keep the frames." I LOVE this part.... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
That was quite a powerful ending. Sandra |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks everyone. And yes, I have a thing for rain. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
well then, that makes two of us |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I noticed. Which sometimes makes me wonder why I moved to a part of the country where there's *so little* rain. Hmm... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
even up in NorCal there isn't enough rain for me...*sigh* maybe someday we'll both end up in Washington lol |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Seattle would be fun, actually. It's got an underground city! |
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