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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Paper Dreams Thoughts like confetti wishes fall through closed hands in the scattering of why? These, my dreams lie at love's feet, in pieces, swept aside for another fairytale by the black pen that smudges out all the straight lines with poetry that doesn't always rhyme and meter that doesn't always flow into a happy ending. Sometimes all you get are papercuts and jagged edges recycled over and over again as an unopened valentine of a cut-out-heart with side graced white lace against the background of red in bleed; A drop of memory still in beat, folded in two waiting to be sent, to be read with eyes' caress and written upon with a new verse. Yes, dreams are made of paper dolls, carefully cut in a pattern of fragile futility in a tapestry of colours and textures attached to heart strings in play that can burn in an instant at the fray of 'if only' and tatter with the end of illegible words. Dreams are all too often like paper, they tear too easily and crumple beneath the weep leaving hope blank upon the page in life's closed book. By Melissa P. Monette |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"These, my dreams lie at love's feet, in pieces, swept aside for another fairytale by the black pen that smudges out all the straight lines with poetry that doesn't always rhyme and meter that doesn't always flow into a happy ending" This is my favorite part, but I could easily have highlighted the entire poem, it is so incredibly wonderful. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, Excellent Write, your talent is showing. Sorry your in the dumps but it take a few bumps to get into the air.  |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
I've always wondered when tears become tears, and vice versa. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Melissa, you've taken my breath away with this piece. Beautiful! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well done my friend. . . you make it seem so permanent. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Dreams are all too often like paper, they tear too easily and crumple beneath the weep leaving hope blank upon the page in life's closed book."  (sigh) Oh Melissa, this is so very sad but true, sweet friend, dreams are indeed quite fragile things, and they can indeed tear so easily, but I know deep down that some dreams are meant to be as sturdy as cardboard that no arrows can penetrate and will always bear words of love in ones heart bound to last forever! (kiss on cheek) This is absolutely touching, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you all for reading I'm so glad that you've enjoyed my words, this poem means a lot to me.And thanks to Janet Marie for reviewing the rough version  Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A drop of memory still in beat, folded in two waiting to be sent, to be read with eyes' caress and written upon with a new verse. ================================= Trust me sweetie...it wasnt "rough" at all ... thank you for the honor ... Once again you impress with the way you pick a theme and carry it thru with clever metaphor and analogy. Each image and emote is a reinforcement of your theme, proving the point of your poem's intend. I love the references to poetry in this... a melancholy masterpiece. Well done poetess Melybee ... and I don't know why ... |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
I am in awe of your writing. You ask the question "why?" in the most profound way dear Lady. This one is a Keeper |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand...love this one, sad |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
missy, wow, this is one of your best, although very sobering and sad. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Missy...Missy, Such incredible poetry. Just when I think there is enough evidence to convict you of being good, it gets better! A keeper indeed.  It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Does poetry get any better than this? I think if we had the answers to the questions you pose, a lot of heartache could be avoided. How very true all of these lines were, and metaphorically speaking or not, this spoke so much truth, the end result of reading this was all too familiar and painful I am sure for many. Well done Melissa, and I could see the time you spent on this one, it shows. Into the library it goes! Imagination is more important that knowledge |
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Melodie Morningstarr Junior Member
since 2002-05-09
Posts 16Toronto, ON, Canada |
Honestly, I've seen this metaphor used many times before, but, you add a freshness vividness to it with such relatable sadness. Very well written! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Paper dolls and paper dreams Life's not always what it seems All we can aspire to be Is subject to fragility.. wonderful work, Melissa  |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i enjoyed this very much..wonderfully done hon...from beginning to end..hugss ~Victoria |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
Melliebee, Man can you write it.... just stopped by tonight to see what was there. What an incredible write!!! I am placing this in my treasure chest right now.... And I would like to tell you how much this poem meant to me.... I was a frustrated young woman once too. I have definately been in your shoes. Well done with this one!!! Love (especially), Light and Peace. Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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