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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Keen eyes see the billowing elephants marching. In one swift breeze, the white-powdered mold takes new shape - forming a face. (c) Kdw, 2000-2002 |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Okay Kim, Maybe I'm too drugged after surgery...I don't get it! Help me out here.  It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
My take is that you are talking about the changing formations in the clouds, and how we interpret them in our minds eye. Interesting~ |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
interesting - my take is that of a sculptor with an image in [her] mind as hands hit the plaster to form the visage of an elephant. either way, good grouping. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
yes.... I see it too *s M |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
I'm having fun reading each of your interpretations and find them quite interesting  Blues - You "see" it. It is clouds as they move and take interesting shapes.. I always found it fun (as a child - alright, alright even now..) to find a image within them. Thanks for reading! |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
Geez.......had to go 4 pages down to find this. I love the imagery in this piece. Reminds me of my childhood when I could see anything my mind could imagine in a cloud formation. Another thing....there are elements in this poem that could be incorporated into a great haiku. |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Jonas - Thank you for finding this, reading it - and pointing out the possibility to "play" with the lines and words a bit and turn it into a haiku. :0) I think I can, I think I can, I think I can... |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Kim, Thanks for the help. ROTFLMBO I did that clear into adulthood. But I was...oh never mind. I'll be better when I'm through drugging the pain. LOL It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Larry - When you are through drugging the pain, eh? I hope that does not last long. Oh come on!! Don't leave me wondering what you were going to say! ; ) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Calling clouds white-powdered mold, huh? No wonder I've been sneezing. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-02-2002 03:44 PM).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
FYI - i wasn't suggesting that the other interpretations were wrong (which apparently they weren't!) just that one can gather more from it. Chris |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
bsquirrel - I'm smiling at ya! Hey, poectic license, right? ; ) Chris - I know and found your interpretation very special Sometimes I enjoy seeing / reading different interpretations - it makes writing and reading more interesting. *smile* Thanks again for your replies! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Gee, I thought it was a rabbit changing into an owl |
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