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Abduction
By: Noah Eaton
2/8/03

Momma slowly hangs up the phone, quivering
Mushroom clouds of sulfur fill her mind
The living colors evil twin cousin is knocking on my window
Black storks descending to take their babies tonight...

Black storks descending tonight...


Listen, the screen door slams, Hey Son, have I got news for you!
Her veins from her hand trembling, gone red to blue
Those same hands she used to nurture and feed her kids
These same hands will be empty now, how will she take this?

Call yourself Abduction
Call yourself Blasphemy
Call yourself AUTODAFE
Who will account for the frost heaving?
While you're in your neck of the wood pretending you're breathing?
Meanwhile, I'll just keep standing my ground
Watching the mothers tidy pre-made beds
Stirring ladles in chicken soup for the usurped soul
Victims of this invisible abduction
Victims of this shame...

Biscuits and gravy are lying on the kitchen table
The last meal she will see her son eat before he goes
She swears that psalm on her china plate will remain her leitmotif
But the sunlight it reflects lacks the birefringence she thought she'd keep

How does it feel to have incalary days?
How does it feel if you can really feel these birth pangs?
So why need all of this circumscription?
If you want this damn thing so bad, why don't you come and get it?

Call yourself Abduction
Call yourself Blasphemy
Call yourself AUTODAFE
Who will account for the frost heaving?
While you're in your neck of the wood pretending you're breathing?
Meanwhile, I'll just keep standing my ground
Watching the mothers tidy pre-made beds
Stirring ladles in chicken soup for the usurped soul
Victims of this invisible abduction
Victims of this shame...

The instance I read the autoinoculation in the news today
Was the second I came down with the sickness
The instance I saw the thieves running through my neighborhood
I found myself already behind the portcullis...

But I dare not say what I think you're going to say
Gerrymandling on your abridged interpretations of the agenda
Ghostwriting with scholars you've never shaken hands with
Playing chess with a ghost that only wants an armistice

Here's Allegro to resemble the shackles of innocence
Here's Adagio to assert the red vultures of pestilence
Here's Andante to reveal behind the cloaks the real idiots
Here's Presto to place blame on the ransoms you permit...

Call yourself Abduction
Call yourself The Tragedian
Call yourself Gethsemane
Who will account for the frost heaving?
While you're in your neck of the wood pretending you're breathing?
Meanwhile, I'll just keep standing my ground
Watching the mothers tidy pre-made beds
Stirring ladles in chicken soup for the usurped soul
Victims of this invisible abduction
Victims of this wicked game...













"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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1 posted 2003-03-01 06:35 PM


Noah.....WOW
outstanding my friend.....
blow me away ..........

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

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2 posted 2003-03-01 07:03 PM


nice one mate
i had some trouble understanding some of the words but what the heck good work

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3 posted 2003-03-01 07:12 PM


Noah my sidekick...your poetry grows in leaps and bounds..
Wonderful and profound write!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

the_loner_23
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4 posted 2003-03-01 07:23 PM


Whoa!!! But I really liked it. Had a lot of truth.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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5 posted 2003-03-01 07:25 PM


Very nice Noah...you really have an outstanding control of the English language...makes me feel lacking...James
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6 posted 2003-03-01 07:29 PM


How I've missed your work!  Sheer brillance!

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

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7 posted 2003-03-01 07:46 PM


wow
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8 posted 2003-03-01 08:13 PM


Jeepers Noah!! This one is a knockout! hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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9 posted 2003-03-01 08:27 PM


Powerful poem. I had to read it more than once to grasp it fully, but it was really worth the extra effort!
You stand your ground!
Your mom should be proud!
Love, Margherita

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10 posted 2003-03-03 12:00 PM


Noah...Very touching write.
The depth of your writing leaves me in awe of your talent.
Not sure if this is right, but what I get from this poem is the dangers faced by the young children each day on the streets where their souls are abducted and mothers grieve for them and wait for them to return home...Paul

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11 posted 2003-03-03 02:37 AM


Noah - just astounding - I feel the same as James - somehow though I was left more with the feeling of a young son going off to war never to return . . . xxoo
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12 posted 2003-03-03 05:10 AM


congratualtions Noah
arthur

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13 posted 2003-03-03 05:42 AM


this just reminds me of times my sister dissapeared and I still kept setting the table for her... or after my grandpas death, I set the table for him so many times...
but its alright, we don't eat at the table anymore, and things are working for the best. This is powerful noah.. very strong!
Well done.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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14 posted 2003-03-03 05:53 AM


Woah, Noah!  I'm wordless... I'm not sure I understood it all, but I am in awe. Wow...

Sometimes you find a friend where once there wasn't one. Sometimes you find a love where once there was a friend.

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15 posted 2003-03-03 09:30 AM


ditto

:-)

KS

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16 posted 2003-03-03 09:35 AM


WOW!

.....thinking of proper descriptive words now....vocabulary too small.....giving up and just saying -- Gee whiz, what a poem!

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17 posted 2003-03-03 11:29 AM


Noah...Powerful and touching...An amazing write, my friend.  
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18 posted 2003-10-12 12:01 PM


noah that was the best i've read so far out of the ones i read from you
           love
            shawna
p.s. krystopher told me that i should read your poems

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19 posted 2008-01-29 10:03 PM


Very Much Enjoyed

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