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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-02-25 06:51 PM

these days,
of scattered roses, sprinkled in eyes,
when the sun blinds as it rises,
its presence overriding any ominous clouds,
when i could just jump in between the deep greys,
weave myself into a spell of love,
paint my own pretty sky,
illusions of romance inked,
if only for a moment
upon heart, soul and mind,

these days,
before the magic vanishes,
covered up in reality's clouds,
before i must see all above and below as is-
quite majestic, but without the spins i give -
of circus clowns, trees dancing beneath
scattered silvery stars,

these days,
before the call of home to comittment's hold,
when i can walk the cakewalk,
sashay down the avenue of moon beams,
ballet lightly in step,
drift away in a pirouette's turn,

these days,
when whirlwind highs erase any lows,
suddenly swept away by surprise,
not knowing what hit me, when, how or why,

these days,
to take as gift, and not ask why,
faith that beneath this scarred heart,
that dwells in earth's prison,
i can still most days, soar up high,
the silly dreaming girl,
that i was once born

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (02-26-2003 04:21 PM).]

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-02-25 06:58 PM

I really enjoyed the expression of feeling here. It is an awesome poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-02-25 07:35 PM

Lot of feeling in this.. Enjoyed.

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2003-02-25 10:55 PM

Can so see the pictures painted with the colors of a wild heart. Smiling...
Enjoy your work. ThisDiamond

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-02-25 11:10 PM

You captured these days in all their splendor as well as the ones that fall in between.

Love your flair Michele~

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

5 posted 2003-02-26 01:42 AM

A warm blend of dreams and fantasy,
blanketing reality.

Sounds like a good spot to spend a little time.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2003-02-26 01:45 AM

"when i can walk the cakewalk,
sashay down the avenue of moon beams,
ballet lightly in step,
drift away in a pirouette's turn,"

I enjoyed the lightness and carefree attitude of this moment.

carpe diem

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-02-26 02:27 AM

neat write! I enjoyed this Michele

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2003-02-26 07:10 PM

enjoyed

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

9 posted 2003-02-26 07:20 PM

these days,
when whirlwind highs erase any lows,
suddenly swept away by surprise,
not knowing what hit me, when, how or why,

I like these times, when the highs make you forget the lows. Nice write. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2003-02-26 07:52 PM

(sigh) Yes, always nurture the spirit of the girl in your heart as you will always shine with her love! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is touching, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michele, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Albert J. Allie
Senior Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 512
Queens NY

11 posted 2003-02-26 07:55 PM

<~~Need I say more?

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

12 posted 2003-02-26 08:20 PM

Liking this piece.

Has some great phases.

Ed

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

13 posted 2003-02-26 08:25 PM

faith that beneath this scarred heart,
that dwells in earth's prison,
i can still most days, soar up high,
the silly dreaming girl,
that i was once born

These could be my favourite lines and this my favourite piece of yours

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

14 posted 2003-02-26 08:36 PM

This was well thought out Michele and one of the best works in your growing repetoire. I read it and reread it several times to get the unlying meaning. Terrific.....

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

15 posted 2003-02-26 08:58 PM

Michelle, this is a very good poem. I think it's your best I've read so far, too...

Hugs,
Ethel

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

16 posted 2003-02-26 09:20 PM

muchas gracias, amigos

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

17 posted 2003-02-26 10:48 PM

btw I hope you'll submit something for the book, I'd like to think that if i'm going to buy the thing there's something in there of yours..

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

18 posted 2003-02-26 10:51 PM

inkedgoddess - I would vote for this but I don't see the book window to vote. I believe that yours should be in it...

BC

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

19 posted 2003-02-27 06:56 AM

thanks,
bill , raffi- nice of you to say

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