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Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2003-02-28 06:36 PM

The Odd Couple

They met each Saturday at Denny’s
For a late breakfast or early lunch
Their friendship grew from nowhere
It was a whim, a smile, a hunch

She was a bit older than he
But their souls were aged with life
She had been alone so long
He was alone but he still had a wife

The waitress knew them by sight
She watched them both arrive
In separate cars each Saturday
For a respite from everyday lives

Each was honest about their feelings
They knew this was a one way street
The week was something they endured
Looking forward to Saturday’s treat

She panicked when he was sick
He called to say he wouldn’t show
She didn’t go to Denny’s that day
She was lost, without a place to go

The next week they got together again
But it was different for her you see
She watched him as he chatted on
Thinking ‘please, not me, not me’

Somewhere between the ‘Grand Slam’
And the carafe of juice they shared
She realized she could never divulge
Just how much she cared

Their friendship grew from nowhere
It was a hunch, a smile, a whim
But now it took new meaning as
She knew she was in love with him.

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-02-28 06:41 PM

How sweet. *claps hands* I love this.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2003-02-28 06:46 PM

Ooooh, this could be a series...maybe ...... hmmmm? Really enjoyed this. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-02-28 07:55 PM

(smiles) Oh Sharon, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this made me smile as so many of your wonderful words do and I too hope this is a series so we get to see their love grow! (big hugggssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

4 posted 2003-02-28 08:36 PM

Maybe it is just my mood-- but this gave me such a feeling of sadness.

Great writing as usual Sharon.

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2003-02-28 09:50 PM

It's hard to fight the feeling
and the fear of so much to lose.

I hope you find a balance that
you can live with if indeed this
pertains to you.

This pulls at my heart strings~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-02-28 09:53 PM

I know this, the hesitation and the fear of non-reciprication, the fear of ruining something too good to be true..

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-02-28 10:23 PM

Sharon, maybe it's just me, but I felt a sadness in this, too. It's hard for a person to realize they have fallen for someone who may never return that love. And, it would also be hard knowing that if she revealed her feelings, then the possibility of the one thing she looked forward to might end.

I don't know if this is written from personal experiences, but I do know that you certainly did make it sem real to me. It made me want to give her a hug.......

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2003-02-28 11:47 PM

It's not from personal experience, I seldom write about me. And it's meant to be sad...in many ways. Thank you all so much for your kind remarks. You are all very sweet!

Fred Hobbs
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 329
Tallahassee, Florida, US

9 posted 2003-03-01 08:41 AM

If it's not about you, you at least must've done the research Sharon. I'm heading for Denny's right now. Great as always . . .

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

10 posted 2003-03-01 10:49 AM

Love is the only good reason I can think of for eating at Denny's!!

Poignant write Sharon. Sad, sweet story.

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

11 posted 2003-03-01 01:08 PM

One of your greatest talents (among so many) is that you can write a poem, and always have so many people relate to it in some way. You always touch people, Sharon. So good to read you.

Etain
Member

since 2003-02-22

Posts 92
The moon...

12 posted 2003-03-01 01:37 PM

It's beautiful Poet de Vine, drinking your wine in these words.
Warm hugs,
Etain.

[This message has been edited by Etain (03-01-2003 01:38 PM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2003-03-01 02:00 PM

neat story...I enjoyed

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

14 posted 2003-03-01 04:58 PM

You really put this together nice. Somewhere in a Dennys this is probably happening right now...or maybe something similar...James

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

15 posted 2003-03-01 05:20 PM

I had a hunch I would enjoy this and you didn't disappoint me. I was like waffles without too much syrup.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

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