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The Pond |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
There is a secret pond I know Atop a secret hill Nestled in a secret land Where the wind and air is still. The secret pond is a magic pond It knows every single wish That every being ever made Inside it swim no fish. I once dared to look into that pond To see what I might find And instead of finding my reflection I found one more refined. A little girl, just ten years old Staring blankly back at me She whispered something oh, so quiet... She had whispered "Set me free" My face then twisted in confusion Yet I yearned to help, console... A blank yet saddened look she gave me... As if someone stole her soul. I timidly touched the water surface And not to much surprise That little girl, she disappeared, With a sad, despair-filled cry. Perplexed, I headed down the hill To continue in my day But that little girl, she stayed with me, In my mind- she didn't stray. Little did I know, back then, That little girl was me- Or rather she was the little girl That hide's inside of me. Burned too often to come out, She stays hidden in her shell. Engulfed in flames and teardrops mixed, She stays hidden in her hell. And forget not that the earth delights to feel your bare feet and the winds long to play with your hair. -Kahlil Gibran |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I really liked this. Took me on a journey to a secret land. Good write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
welcome! I enjoyed your poem very much. aloha and a big hug, Cher Poetry is: |
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sellout007 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 108Suburbs of Chicago, IL |
MMm enjoyed this veerrryy much! Saved it for later readings! thanks for sharing, and wonderfully written. A dream is but a dream, you can wake up. Reality is ultimate, and those who share it with us are far more important than anything we could remember, |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thanks to you all very much!  And forget not that the earth delights to feel your bare feet and the winds long to play with your hair. -Kahlil Gibran |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know of that little girl. I have one of my own |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Fascinating read, but why would the little girls within us dwell in hell? Let her come out to play as often as you can and you'll set her free! Margherita |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Sadly...it's not quite that easy... I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Are you sure this poem wasn't derived from MY LIFE?? I really loved the honesty and how open you are here! And THIS part.... "Burned too often to come out, She stays hidden in her shell. Engulfed in flames and teardrops mixed, She stays hidden in her hell." I KNOW ALL TOO WELL Beautifully done....Hugs... |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Lol, thank you very much  That note really made me smile (=I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
KoKo, this poem touched me deeply. You have a beautiful way of expressing yourself and bringing the reader along as you tell your fascinating tale. The little girl in me says "hello" to the little girl in you!--Would you like to come out and play? Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Aaaaaw, thank you very much!!! That was so touching!!! You are all so sweet and wonderful here!!! I'm moving in!!! lol Thank you very much Earth Angel, for your note. It lifted my spirits right up!!! !!(...I seem to be using a lot of exclamation points and " " faces here...lol you guys always seem to cheer me up!!!...and there I go again with the exclamation points lol)I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
KoKo - very nice write, a secret place I like it... BC |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
KoKo...a lovely, intriguing poem... thank you for sharing a look inside... |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you Bill and Sunshine!  !I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Koko I am sure you know what I am thinking right now  Do I need to say it? Big BIG fan of yours. I loved that this made me think back of my younger days (not that I am old or anything haha) Great visions you produced here. ~~SIGH~~ |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Wow, thanks again Albert!!! Now I'M the one blushing!!! lol stop it!! hehehehe !!!I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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