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Inner Cafe (duet with Corinne)
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Inner Cafe (duet with Corinne) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
We sent the same words between us, circling again true meaning like vultures gliding on the currents of heated pains Each drawing a portrait of the other - word sketches in charcoal grays and overcast days Images outlining details held vague to pointillist survey, of how one connected to one or any related past Impressionistic ink blotted to indigo lips, faded, folded napkins raised to cover questioning mouths And we, in polite smiles nod to all that pass - not seeing us reach for frames to hang without knowing the image’s mirror [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (02-21-2003 06:16 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A blending... compromise, promise... perfect |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ron and Corinne, this is beautiful, sweet friends, how nice to build your own cafe within and invite all your blessings in and talk about the weather and place bonsai plants on all the windowsills! (big hugggsssssss) I love this, sweet friends, you two write so well together, yay, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Ron and Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I want to thank Corinne ( spelled it right didn't I?) for indulging me and suffering through the process. Sunshine.. thank you dear friend. Noah... your comments are always insightful and appreciated.. thank you Cor... you do deserve the largest thanks and praise... in this endeavor.. so thank you again. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Impressionistic ink blotted to indigo lips, faded, folded napkins raised to cover questioning mouths I can just picture this...*s very nice M |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you ma'am.... Cor's contribution or one of them... and yes..it is easily seen and the words paint the image well... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sunshine, Noah, M - thank you kindly! Ron - you are waaayyy too humble, my friend! You deserve a lot more credit than you are taking! Cor |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
So creative, you two. Really enjoy it from the title, and then the first and last stanza, WOW!...the entire poem terrific and never lost the theme... Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Cor... not too modest at all.. I know who wrote what remember..and I know how your imagery here carries so much of the theme.. Pat.. thank you ma'am! Glad you liked it... Cor had to compromise her style a bit so I could keep up... but carried me quite well through transition phrases as well as strong imagery... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron and Corinne--I loved reading this...you did a great job melding! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you Martie... you're next... when you feel up to my arguing and aggravating ways of all the people I have read here and tried to emulate their style... you are by far the most difficult for me to imitate... you are simply that good..and your style so uniquely colored by your heart.... hugs to you!! |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Each read just keeps getting better. Beautifully done you two! Sunkissed."I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Nicely done...bravo to both of you... believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
wonderful collaboration... regards to both of you... Sudhir |
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