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Angry Haiku Attempt
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Angry Haiku Attempt |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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First attempt, so only laugh in subtle tones. Anger creases brow Enacting lovers dark vow Reprieve can't allow |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Susan Good try, enjoyed. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Susan. The first two lines work very well for me, but I must admit that I don't quite follow your gist with the last one. Sounds neat tho'! Warm morning hugs, EA |
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Darksoul Member
since 2003-01-31
Posts 61 |
For a first time I would have to say exceptionally well done. Technically it would be a senyru (spelling?) because it is based on humun emotion rather then nature. I have written a few which I'll post for kicks and giggles. -Brad Majors |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow, I didn't know a Haiku could show that kind of emotion! Thanks for the lesson..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
EEK, let me put on the padding... |
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Darksoul Member
since 2003-01-31
Posts 61 |
it was very good !! |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Senryu it is And Haikus don't have to rhyme A great first attempt Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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