Open Poetry #25 |
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stating the obvious |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
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you seem nervous? your question though quite pointed has bad aim and not only irritates but astounds me... despite the fact that you weren’t there only moments ago... wait... .did I say moments? somehow it seems a lifetime.. about ten sarcastic replies do battle on the tip of my tongue but I refrain from speaking and simply bite your head off you obviously have no need for eyes if you cannot tell by the gaunt look on my face that I just experienced a piece of hell and lived through it you clearly have no need for your mouth as you continually let careless words slip through it you apparently have no need for a brain if you abstain from using it and you evidently have no need of ears if from your distance you cannot hear my heart breaking ok...I know this is bad...will excuse this with saying that yesterday was bad to at least the 3rd or 4th power...sigh |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but..but...it's out now... 3rd or 4th power, hey? I've had years like that... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! I can SO relate! peace to you JB and better days |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is not bad. It's wonderful, spoken as only one who has known such devastation can write. Wait til ~M~ and Dixie see it... Very real and honest. Enjoyed, (I am sorry to tell you) Hugs, Pat ![]() ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Now how is it that you can even pitch a fit poetically? *S* This hits me on two distinct levels... it fills me with sorrow that you're having to go through such troubling times... and yet it also fills me with admiration that you're able to articulate so amazingly... when under similar circumstances I fear I'd be reduced to screaming "I'm fed up!" *S* Excellent work! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all...sigh...almost jerked this one down...but...hey, even poets have really bad days..... sunshine...years...yep afraid I know just what you mean... ps...*smile* too bad we relate on such a rough level.... pat...thank you...it needed to get out, so its good that someone enjoyed it suthern...you just like me that's all...but thank you for your comments, I love the way you read my poems...and thank you...for likeing me |
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BlueEyes Member
since 2002-08-30
Posts 152TX, USA |
I loved this! Especially... "you apparently have no need for a brain if you abstain from using it" If I had a nickel for everytime I told my husband this... but never have I done it so poetically..... Isn't it so annoying when you've had the worst day and come home to listen to more nonsense?!? very much enjoyed. BlueEyes |
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