Word's Don't Always Mean What They Say (Challenge)

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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2003-04-11 07:29 PM

"I'll hate you forever!"
I flung at the closed door,
as tears flowed freely
coursing down my face
like a river in flood
with no place to go
but down,
leaving sparkling droplets
on the uncaring chin
made stubborn by pride
and restrained grief.

"I'll hate you forever"
I whispered softly
to the stuffed toys
that line up on my bed
for hugs or kicks
as the situation demanded,
their button bright eyes
offering no condemnation
their soft bodies
committed to giving
warmth and comfort
without reserve
in the darkness
of the night for my sorrow

"I'll hate you forever"
I sob brokenly into my pillow
knowing that the punishment
is just - and yet
not accepting the cruelty of it
my condemnation fuelled
by the passion of youth;
while the weight of the pillow
hides my fears
that forever may begin tonight-
knowing that I could do
this deed and then they
would be sorry
but desiring to breathe
all the more
for the lack of air.

"I'll hate you forever"
I write furiously on the paper
not willing to let go
of my pain and anger
in the sleeplessness
of an endless night
while angry purple
splotches
of ink fill the page
of my yearning
looking for a different way
a better path.

"I'm sorry!" I wrote, "I do love you."
"Forgive me"
and I posted the note
under her closed door
only to find the door
flung open and my anger
buried in the warmth
of her outstretched arms.

Words don't always mean what they say.

Larry Chadwick's Challenge: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000552.html
The hat is still waiting for you to reach in.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

[This message has been edited by Kethry (04-11-2003 08:15 PM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-04-11 08:16 PM

What a beautiful honest post, definitely a positive rise to this challenge.

dreambuilder
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since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

2 posted 2003-04-11 08:25 PM

alrighty - you got me welling tears at the end here
beautiful write - I loved it

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2003-04-11 08:38 PM

A challenge well met

Gloom

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-04-11 08:39 PM

Kethry! Excellent! Truthful...and
family!

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 2003-04-11 09:06 PM

This poem is wonderful!!!

(of course, words don't always mean what they say

)

I'm kidding!!

I LIKE it!

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2003-04-11 09:28 PM

Remember this almost word for word from my own daughter! (you've been in her head??).

Wonderful write, my friend.

jwesley

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2003-04-12 01:04 AM

Kethry - only as you can write, you're one of the best...

BC

lost_star
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 114
NY, U.S.A

8 posted 2003-04-12 01:31 AM

I really enjoyed this one. Great work!

LUV_R_GIRL2379
Junior Member

since 2003-04-09

Posts 42

9 posted 2003-04-12 01:34 AM

This poem was very touching! and very true kids often say alot of things they dont mean.very good write ..keep up the good work!

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

10 posted 2003-04-12 04:46 PM

A challenge well met Lynne

Dance
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since 2003-03-28

Posts 34

11 posted 2003-04-13 02:52 PM

A beautiful write. I actually started to tear up, I'm not joking!

~*~DaNcE~*~

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

12 posted 2003-04-13 03:02 PM

This is excellent. From start to finish. Thanks for sharing.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

13 posted 2003-04-13 06:44 PM

I give it my Triple R rating! Real, Raw, and Right write! Hmmmm! Or is that a Quadruple R rating!

You hit home with that one!

Warm hugs,
EA

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2003-04-14 09:35 AM

This strikes such a chord... I think we've all played at least one of these parts... maybe both. *S* Wonderful poem, Keth... and a challenge well met. *S*

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

15 posted 2003-04-14 12:09 PM

Lynne:

know this well - you know (strangely) I still have all of those stuffed animals . . . excellent job - xxoo

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

16 posted 2003-04-14 04:03 PM

The intensity of childhood! How well I remember Ginger's moment... Nicely done. An A+.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

17 posted 2003-04-15 03:24 AM

love this! and can relate very well!

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