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to April's rain [Remembering Martie] |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho 
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twilight and the path you had taken to and from the old tree arises from the mist though they are passed and gone as are you far far away from me and as the darkness descends your ghost returns again to flaunt me and where the little swing creaks & blows empty in the wind you come running and grabbing the chain jump into its cradle push momma push you still need me to get you started you ask the ageless questions of discovery while your hair sails on the breeze momma why don’t we have wings like a bird momma why did the old dog die will we see ‘em in Heaven grandma calls from the kitchen and your off and running with your wandering vision into bed and I am left alone with the empty swing creaking in the wind I wake to April's rain but the dream will find and leave me again like your beaten path to the old old tree and swing and there again you'll find me [This message has been edited by lucky (04-11-2003 01:47 AM).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What a tender and sweet remembrance. This was so felt by me that it has left me somewhat speechless. This was truly a very heartfelt and extremely well done piece. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I thank you so much Mysteria... What a tender and sweet thing to say. Martie and I have felt many of the same vibrations but I don't think they have ever left us speechless. (I could be wrong) It was however truly heartfelt. dale Speaking of ghosts, and after such an eternity. . .wouldn't you know, here comes mine again... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dale, my dear friend...you have touched my heart many times, but never more then now in your sure knowlege of swings and things. Heart hugs and love to you and Rosemary. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is amazingly beautiful and full of the love of life. A keeper, to enjoy in April, and every other month. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Beautiful in word, and presentation.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write..fantastic imagery. Full of wonderful remember. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
absolutely beautiful write. I enjoyed this little treasure! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is truly beautiful. I had to go back and read it again to feel the goosebumps it gave me once more. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Thank you all so much, and you Marti are such a treasure... thank you. dale |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky~ Ohhhhhhh, my friend ..... you catch me suspended mid-air ... what lovely, lovely thoughts cascaded through my head as I read, and read and read again~ You ARE FRIENDSHIP to the nth degree~  Martie and I are both blessed to know you~ *Huglets* right to you~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A very arresting combination of form and substance in this one.... ...and in spite of the raw emotional punch of a subject like this one, you captured the nightmare of it without losing control of the narrative or the scarily understated tone -- riveting all the way down. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Dale - Oh my - this is lovely: you ask the ageless questions of discovery while your hair sails on the breeze momma why don’t we have wings this sings . . . xxoo |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Marge, so... to the nth degree huh... you & Martie have been the sisters I never had and no one could ask for better. love you both. Ratleader, some very well chosen words here in your re: The form came about when my English teacher (mother in law) said something about prose being eye-tiring so I came up with the art form. Now she wants to see everything I write. Nice compliment about control. Thanks much. littlewing, honestly, I need to get over and read some of your works. Thank you all again for your gracing my words. lucky dale |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I like that form, but it plays heck with my dyslexia....All the same, I think I'll fight my way past that...eye-popping curves or not, they're well done and worth the reading if this is any indication. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky~ Awwwwwwwwwww ! See, it's why we both love you so~ AND ... Martie and I are sisters-of-the-heart ... so it only stands to reason that we both think of you as brother~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AND ... Ed~ Go back into the archives and smart search for Lucky's stuff .... he's WELL WORTH THE READ~ AND ... check out the wonderful poetry of Rosemary Gwaltney too ! (his lovely wife) You're in for a treat on both counts ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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