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Left, Poem tell me what you think plz
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Left, Poem tell me what you think plz |
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LastMoments Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92 |
These lost forgotten tears That fall like hollow rain Each droplet holding its own A story to a hidden past A broken shelter lost within A hand that hangs alone Where is my place to grasp Does falling mean this much? Landing on the ground It soaks what life remains As dreams seem to sufficate And burn in bitter anguish As this wish becomes unknown And desires fade like shadows To the sun that lights the ground To make me feel no more To leave me by myself |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
LastMoments - you said you wanted to know someones thoughts about this poem. I like what you have said, sad perhaps from inside, but written well with a lot of meaning... BC |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
loneliness is no good...i felt your desire and replusion towards being alone... As dreams seem to sufficate And burn in bitter anguish i like the imagery here..there's a typo error though... the forums move very fast at times...a suggestion: you may get more replies to your work if you read and respond to others...make yourself known... |
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