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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York 
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Invisible I am, to any passerby. Invisible I am, to all who say I. Notice now and here I wait, silence baits at my gate. When times were rough. The doors were closed, I was invisible. Invisible I am, yet not indestructabe. Notice now and here I wait, running from that awful date. When times were tough. The doors were locked with keys, I was invisible, to the visible. When times were rough. Notice now and here I wait, silencing the shattering plate. The times got tough. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Open the doors and let in the "I"s .... I and I may harmonize! Sad but impressive. Margherita |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yes, very very impressive.....and a feeling that most of us have had at one time or another! Well put, I might add! Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~ |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nicely done! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
With a genuine and revealing write such as this, you could never be invisible. You lay bare your emotions and inner thoughts for all to see the real you--sensitive, non-pretentious, open...and talented! ...I see you... Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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SweetSerenity Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 52Canada |
I also enjoyed reading this poem. Reading it made me want to become invisible, even if only for a moment. Good work. ~A touch of Sweetness . . . . . A lifetime of Serenity~ |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Very beautiful poem... But you not invisible to us, any one with poetry like yours will always be popular.  I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Kellie, I used to feel the same way you did, sweet friend, I felt when I was abused in school no one loved me and I was a ghost, but then I learned I had to be proud of myself and concocted Exhibit A: I....and Exhibit B...Me.....together and now I love myself and when others see your smile they will always see you just as your tears are seen by angels and all of us! (sigh) We all send angel hugs out to you, sweet friend, you are loved and it is evident with your golden heart you are transparent, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kellie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-21-2003 03:51 PM).] |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Great work!!!! Enjoyed very much. H |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
A hauntingly, personal poem. A bit of courage here and well written. Rf |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Charisma |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Touching vulnerablility. Nice. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Getting my vote Titis |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I think I wish I could be invisible... just for awhile. But my feet are too set into the battle, I can't lose my place...my back has felt the arrows of those behind me. I can't let those before me feel them also. But I wish.. I really wish... you though, you aren't invisible. I just saw you're heart And felt your pain and peace. you are very visible. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Nicely done Kellie! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Paint yourself brightly Kellie and stay highly visible. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (03-02-2003 12:49 PM).] |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
interesting rhyme scheme.. deep message.. good stuff. count my vote in I have sent you nothing but angels, and I have placed nothing but miracles before you. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kellie, this is really good. I enjoyed reading it. "Love makes the world go around" |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
You definitly have my vote with this one! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
neat write, I enjoyed |
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