Open Poetry #25 |
The Key |
Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The Key In trust I was given a key, My love said “Please, keep this for me, For it fits only my heart, It gives us a start,” On a chain lies the golden key. On a chain lies the golden key, I wear it next near my heart, Though we may be apart A touch of key thrills me As it feels the beat of my heart. For this key was given in trust, By a love that is good and just, He loves only me It’s carved in the key, Though alone my feet step through the dust. A promise was made from his eyes A future we’ll realize, If I held to his key For his heart is in me We’ll someday have reason for sighs. He went off to do as he would For honor is true, and is good, A chain holds his key His promise, you see… For in trust was I given his key. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sun - this is just lovely - what beautiful writing - and this: We’ll someday have reason for sighs. may you please . . . xxoo |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Beautiful.... CONGRATS on the 34000 posts too, my friend from poetry land... Regards, Sudhir P.S. 34000 ... WOW!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Delicate~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ (and ... 34 and more !) ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
LOvely, LOvely Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine A lovely key, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful poem.. Beautiful lady...*love the new pic!* Congrats on your 34,000 Posts! ...and a big thank you for all you do here at PiP. ~Smiles, Hugs, & Congratulations, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always dancing with you in the summer rain~ [This message has been edited by Enchantress (03-31-2003 08:51 AM).] |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Wonderfully romantic poem, Karilea...may you continue to use the key to your creativity to share with us...congratulations on 34,000 posts... believe in what your heart feels... |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
...what a beautiful symbol... I have a cigarette lighter...a symbol of someone I left behind for home.... Great job... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...I love the romance in this, and the promise. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karilea, this is so beautiful. You know that I love it. And, congratulations on 34,000 plus. And, THANK YOU!!!!! Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
I like. ...*reads your critique message* Aw man. You've gotta make this complicated. Let's see... Tell me what it made you feel It reminds me of someone. think, ponder Maybe there are people you can trust. and what you may be taking away I'm resisting the urge to make a smart-assed comment about pick-pocketing the key. heh. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Karilea, you write like an angel with the hope and promise of better things to come. I just loved this and the way it was written. Congratulations on hitting 34,000!! Gosh, you look so young in your picture, but all those posts, honey, you must have been here forever and a day!!! Hugs and luvs, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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