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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-03-30 02:24 PM



Missing You

no I
am not
casually lost
when you
are gone
dreams become
sleepless trances
void is
just sheer
absent lacking
swirling words
escape ink
all I
want shows
blank pages
time and
I do
a lonesome waltz
thoughts escape
on missing
in theory
I could
possess patience
but I am
not good
at waiting


© Copyright 2003 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
Robert Frazier
Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014

1 posted 2003-03-30 03:35 PM


"but I am
not good
at waiting"...you write with honesty and beauty!

Zinsser
Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641
Calif.
2 posted 2003-04-03 03:05 AM


this is a wonderfull write....
has a haunting dream like feel
i love it...

~~ Connie ~~

Seraphine_CoB
Junior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 14
LONDON, UK
3 posted 2003-04-03 03:54 AM


i like the emphisis upon the difference between being lost and dependant and separating want, from consuming need.

love

Sephie
xxxxxxx

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2003-04-03 12:32 PM


that's how I feel although I don't get to end the "missing"

*s
M

vandana
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Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463
USA
5 posted 2003-04-03 02:08 PM


i know how it feels enjoyed
Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

6 posted 2003-04-03 03:37 PM


Once again you have captured beauty with your words.
Eric

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
7 posted 2003-04-04 02:01 PM


as always...
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