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Open Poetry #25

The Rose (haiku)

Dance
Junior Member

since 2003-03-28

Posts 34

0 posted 2003-03-30 12:33 PM

The rose sits
to sing
it's song
of
beauty,
as I wait
for it
to reach
me.

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

1 posted 2003-03-30 02:07 AM

a pretty bit, but how is it a haiku?

you know: 5,7,5 syllables per line respectively.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Aya
Junior Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 42
New Zealand

2 posted 2003-03-30 02:39 AM

i to have to ask, how is it a haiku? Its a beautful poem but how is it meant to be one.

doggie-lover
Junior Member

since 2003-03-29

Posts 23

3 posted 2003-03-30 10:28 AM

Haiku has 17 syllables in it and is about nature. this is my variation, but thank you for the input.
~*~DaNcE~*~

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

4 posted 2003-03-30 12:08 PM

A haiku does have 17 syllables.. broken down into 3 lines of 5-7-5 syllables

Either way, I do like this poem, it is very pretty

Tara

"in my field of paper flowers
and candy clouds of lullaby
i lie inside myself for hours
and watch my purple sky fly over me"
- Imaginary by Evanes

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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5 posted 2003-03-30 12:49 PM

beautiful variation!

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