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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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As she watches the sun set and the stars begin to make their shimmering début She wonders when it was she started hating the night When it was that good nights became so few Pretending ignorance, she slowly shuffles in from the darkness Silently hoping a light switch will take away the nothingness It’s always at night that thoughts of him whisper to her out of nowhere Memories of him are a physical blow that leaves her bare In the cloak of darkness his ghost creeps in, haunting Making her think of times gone by, taunting She knows it’s no use going to bed He follows her into dreams, reminding her of things he said He was a master with words; he knew just what she needed to hear When she was scared, he made her believe there was nothing to fear She gives a sarcastic laugh, as she wipes tears from her face Even now she foolishly longs for his embrace She decides to let her weary body sleep Giving in to thoughts and dreams of what she has been denied to seek She closes her eyes and tentatively reaches hand into the air Praying she will once again feel him there But nothing is offered in response to her pathetic need So she curls into fetal position and hopes for the dream Upon which her wounded self can feed [This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (02-18-2003 03:44 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Susan Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sy, Thank you kind sir. Susan |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very lyrical. Thanks, Eric |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely doen Susan... Much enjoyed. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very well done, and much enjoyed. *smiles* |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
This piece is so awesome I love it!!! But would I expect any less? |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
must not be ignored!!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
....sigh.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
must have missed this before.. sad, but nicely told... I enjoyed the read.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Susan, this is so very sadly touching, sweet friend, I hope this is not a current condition you are dealing with but know we all send angel hugs out to you in knowing your golden dreams will come true, the ones that can't taunt you with hurt but rather with smiles! (sigh) You have my vote, dearest friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
rise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, Susan. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
sometimes we are our own worst enemies... haunting write poetess Susan..well done. " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Darksoul Member
since 2003-01-31
Posts 61 |
This got to be the best poem I have seen [This message has been edited by Darksoul (02-19-2003 06:32 PM).] |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
AS alot of you know,I love the writes of pain.I loved this. well said. Jason |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Passing shadows took my response  but hey for this I will be a copycat! Sigh......... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It's very sad to feel this way...I know, because I've felt like this in the past. It doesn't feel good at all. You wrote the feeling very well. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
For the sheer fact that you hit a nerve you get my vote!  well done indeed. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Ahhh, I so enjoyed this. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Voted. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Brilliant simply brilliant |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
A brilliant poem you have penned here. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Dang, I almost missed this one! Well written, a sad longing for what's been lost, but is still needed. |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
She gives a sarcastic laugh, as she wipes tears from her face Even now she foolishly longs for his embrace I tried to copy just those lines I especially enjoyed, but I loved it from these lines till the finish...I am often seen in the same view as the She in the poem... ~A~ |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
oh yes, very nicely done. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
glad this was bumped up so that i can vote..enjoyed the read [This message has been edited by kaile (03-18-2003 09:22 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Compelling and really grabs at one's guts as well as the heartstrings. I felt the emptiness... Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all! |
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