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MARK V SHELDON
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0 posted 2003-03-25 09:26 AM


TWENTY OR LESS...#113

Copyright 2003 by:  MARK V SHELDON


Shadows flare
over sombre sky

morning's chilling dark
burns

solipsistic whisper
drowns
my omniscient cry

reflecting

in phantasmagoric stare


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1 posted 2003-03-25 09:38 AM


solipsistic whisper
drowns
my omniscient cry

reflecting

in phantasmagoric stare
now my friend..you challenge the images with the hint of surreal and strengthen the tone.in concise use and placement of word..

very well done... and speaking of style... this one has certainly suited you well. You mastery of the short and concise... I now envy.


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2 posted 2003-03-25 10:07 AM


Ron...  a compliment of the highest order, coming from one of my favorite poets!  Thank you, Sir!

-MVS

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3 posted 2003-03-25 10:42 AM


Not one word wasted as usual.
So very well said Mark.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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4 posted 2003-03-25 07:16 PM


A phantasmagoric write, Mark...very well done..

believe in what your heart feels...

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5 posted 2003-03-25 08:23 PM


MARK,
A wring of polished stones sparkling with fantasy, enjoyed.

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6 posted 2003-03-25 09:13 PM


MARK - this is truly stunning, should have been for the book in my opinion...

BC

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7 posted 2003-03-25 09:48 PM




(smiles) Oh Mark, I too always find something strangely comforting about walking beisde the water in the early morning or after the sun goes down, dearest friend, love this wonderful portrayal, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

MARK V SHELDON
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8 posted 2003-03-26 11:50 AM


Nancy...  efficiency is intriguing.  Thank you, as always.

scorpio:  much obliged.

Sy, that's a unique description -- I like it.  Thank you, Sir.

Bill, that's a mighty fine compliment, and I thank you for it, but these are more like "thoughts of the day" for me...

Noah:  ...water...?  Interesting take.  I guess as long as one respects the water and knows one's limitations then everything will be ok...  Thank you, friend...

-MVS

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