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Perfect Imperfections |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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You've turned your back and I cannot see past the horizon of you we are not even distant friends balanced between two worlds going our own way at last. I can no longer conjure up a thought to settle my indifference and that troubles me there is no spanning the time the feeling doesn't come and go it has flown away on it's own. Leaving me missing forever postponed canceling out on false hopes I have no claim to make because I don't ever want to go back to lay my soul bare swaying beneath your palms for shame, the blame that taunts me. You cut deeply and left a scar but you can't weaken my pain threshold however perfect my imperfections I don't bleed that blue. I have broken my promise waving in surrender removed from the pain of losing while trying to hold onto a piece of you something, anything to keep for myself but you are scattered remotely devoted never mine for the taking. Sadly as we approach the end of the runway and the streaming patterns change formation fading into the sunset I have no tears left to leave you. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-20-2003 04:28 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Been there...done that. But couldn't begin to describe as you have so aptly done! Once again, an excellent write. Hopefully, your biggest fan.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very stirring...touching on deep levels. Thanks. Eric |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Larry~ I appreciate you and your kind words so very much. Thank you~ Eric~ Sometimes I get to stirring and can't stop. Don't want to have a melt down when I least expect it!  Thanks~ |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, I know that your poetry writing is perfect. I love it...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Blues... you did this very well..and touched me, with the feelings in the words. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Pat yourself on the back for me! This poem rocks--and so do you! Kudos on all fronts. You are beginning a brand new chapter in the book of your life! Peace & Love, Linda |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, I read this a couple times. Liked the title. Though simple, I think, for me, the most meaningful line is this: "We are not even distant friends" Do I understand that! (My choice) The entire poem is heart touching. Enjoyed very much, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...Closing one door, is opening another. Wishing you all good doors! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Blues you captured this well maybe too well it hurt.. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
so final and so sad it cuts like a knife, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I don't bleed that blue. Blues - no tears . . . yea felt this one I did . . . all sides of you just sing xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-21-2003 05:21 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
You may not bleed that blue, but you bleed...Here |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I'll stop all this bleeding starting today. Sorry, and thank you for reading everyone. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This is magnificent. How well I can relate to the emotions that well up and evaporate for our own sake. You are such a good mentor for the sensible and the spirited in all of us. You haven't been bleeding...that sounds wimpy...Not what I think of when I read you. Let the waters run...you own a most beautiful river there! ThisDiamond |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
ok ok, no more wimping out either. Kathleen, that was awful nice of you. Thank you doesn't seem like nearly enough. But I do, very much. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Leaving me missing forever postponed canceling out on false hopes I have no claim to make because I don't ever want to go back to lay my soul bare swaying beneath your palms for shame, the blame that taunts me. Well, you wowed me with this one. "for shame, the blame that taunts me", oh my, yes! You spoke my heart with those words. Thank you for this.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Now you've bumped up all sides of my imperfections. There's your proof, I am truly every shade of blue, depending on my mood of course. Thank you WhiteRose~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very touching and powerful! Love, Margherita |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Lori, this is so very heartfelt, dearest friend, I send many angel hugs your way and hope all is alright and the sun rises again and the horizons merge together! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Leaving me missing forever postponed canceling out on false hopes I have no claim to make because I don't ever want to go back to lay my soul bare swaying beneath your palms for shame, the blame that taunts me. You cut deeply and left a scar but you can't weaken my pain threshold however perfect my imperfections I don't bleed that blue.' Damn...been awhile since I read anything that felt this honest. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for your kind words Margherita~ Thank you Noah for leaving your thoughts on the sun merging with the horizon....I could almost feel your arm around my shoulder. Hi Duncan~ Honest to a fault huh? It's so good to see your name under mine. Thanks big guy~ |
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