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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2003-03-19 11:24 PM

"LOOK"
he called
and motioned me
one arm waving
face intent
in a squat
above a plot
of discovered universe...
I looked to eyes
for some direct
distracted by
a crystalline
bead of his intensity
hanging on by one eyebrow...
"Are you LISTENING?"
he frowned--
and-my-grace-
oh-then, he smiled.
"Are you listening--
Wild Child?"
His laughter patterned on my past
just the way his fingers are,
impatiently,
upon my knee
driving miles,
to make a point...

"Look." He said with patience now.
"SEE, as if you were a child..."

I smiled at him in understand.
"Do you like butter?"
Then he picked
the bloom budding,
from its stem,
threatening me--
with the truth...

Then we wrestled clover fields.

I think the clover won.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-20-2003 12:46 AM).]

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2003-03-20 12:24 PM

K I LOVE this! You paint with words, is there such thing as surrealist poetry because you dear are Dali with words and you know i looooooove Dali

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-03-20 01:25 AM

Wild Child?"

you question this?
To be by your side must be like feeling right at home . . .

glad the clover won . . . xxoo

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2003-03-20 06:39 PM

Are you listening--
Wild Child?"
His laughter patterned on my past
just the way his fingers are,
impatiently,
upon my knee
driving miles,
to make a point...

"Look." He said with patience now.
"SEE, as if you were a child..."

I smiled at him in understand.
"Do you like butter?"
Then he picked
the bloom budding,
from its stem,
threatening me--
with the truth...

Then we wrestled clover fields.

I think the clover won.
===============================

No...I won...in getting to read this delightful vignette of you.

The Sun The Moon The Stars The Sky
none of these would my love deny.
For of all the true found in the blue
its twice as much that I love you.

jm

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-03-20 07:04 PM

"Look." He said with patience now.
"SEE, as if you were a child..."

I smiled at him in understand.
"Do you like butter?"
Then he picked
the bloom budding,
from its stem,
threatening me--
with the truth...

Then we wrestled clover fields.

I think the clover won."
=============================================
Karen...this is fantastic!
This makes me feel as though I really know you.
I love it!! And...I'm keeping it!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2003-03-20 07:58 PM

threatening me--
with the truth

pretty big threat...

as always... moved...

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2003-03-20 08:18 PM

I would like to echo Raph's remarks! But I actually believe that you are more of a Salvadore Delilah!

Peace & Light,
EA

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2003-03-20 09:05 PM

serenity...bold and beautiful, you!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2003-03-21 08:04 PM

Thank you all...

This one was not one of my "story" poems, but more of an attempt to capture a feeling--
I've got some very special people in my life and I am one lucky lady.

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