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for my younger brother
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for my younger brother |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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you squinted your eyes and didn't cease even as my figure grew larger in your vision~ you, the image-conscious one who ditched his spectacles ever since, as you confessed in a phone conversation with your friend, that the girls found you more dashing that way we just stood and let the seconds consume the silence between us, for lack of a better thing to do, yet adamant that something be done I did take in your height and body though, wondering how it is for you to look down at me and my puny figure now I never really did that before I finally suggested that we go home and you deferentially walked more than a few steps behind me, all the while stroking your slick centre-parted hair, perhaps as a defense against the agony of talking to me while I asked your shadow when it was exactly that I lost the brother that I taught poker and other assorted stuff [This message has been edited by kaile (03-18-2003 10:51 AM).] |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
heh, reminds me of a conversation I had with my brother a couple of weeks ago... when I asked him what happened, he told me it was my fault that I left him at home when I moved out... I should have just stuck with what was in my head..."we're two different people and while growing up, we grow differently..." Good write :-) |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
We do all grow up differently and sometimes we lose touch. Very well done |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your poem brought back memories of my own. My brother is 12 months and 1 day younger that I am. When we were young(er), I was much taller and I really played the big sister role. I was also his protector. Now he's 6 feet 5 inches tall and he acts more like my big brother and I'm his little sister! I actually like this reversing of roles! I enjoyed your little story with its vivid images and the emotions felt. Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
this..you did with an insight and understanding that it takes some a lifetime to understand.. the eventual alienation of those close to us as we grow and they do the same...the independence and the reluctance for either of you to reach out in a meaningful way and bridge the distance leaves you both uncomfortable as well as him still walking more than a few paces behind you... in the end you wonder... what happened to the one you taught these other games..and yet fail to teach him a larger one by being the one to teach him family and connections are something that someone has to take the lead on.. be the initiator...the one to open the other up... you think it... but don't act on it... insightful in that life is so like that at times.. even when we ourselves would like the very thing we will not facilitate... well done... I enjoyed |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kaile, I think this an exceptional write. So thought provoking, your wondering outloud a tender, touching subtle, soft ache of the differences and lack of communication and the changes which are taking place. I like this a great deal. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Can I be so sure to say that you wrote this piece based on personal experience? I think I really like this part: "I did take in your height and body though, wondering how it is for you to look down at me and my puny figure now I never really did that before" Reminds us that your bro was equally puny, if not even more so, when he was much younger. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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