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Open Poetry #25

a spring senryu

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

0 posted 2003-03-17 11:30 AM

bird brained noise pervades
distemper away with wings
Ha! life will intrude

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2003-03-17 11:32 AM

Now that is what I'd call an in-your-face senryu! I wasn't expecting that one!

Hope your spring is a good one!

EA

ngoliant
Junior Member

since 2003-03-13

Posts 20
Eastof theSun&WestoftheMoon

2 posted 2003-03-17 12:16 PM

I love these! The form and the content.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

3 posted 2003-03-18 09:37 AM

well, i got from this a sense of arrogance..don't know whether i interpreted correctly but i like what i felt anyway..

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2003-03-18 12:26 PM

Clapping...
Such joy harvested from the daring of the winter thaw!
Great write. ThisDiamond

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

5 posted 2003-03-18 12:44 PM

Brilliantly done!

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

6 posted 2003-03-18 12:58 PM

Hah! This makes me laugh---well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

7 posted 2003-03-18 09:18 PM

majnu, yep, this is an in your face senryu, as only you can do. I like it!

waldopepper
Member

since 2003-03-18

Posts 157
Tennessee, USA

8 posted 2003-03-18 09:23 PM

Well, well, look who else visits this interesting site! Hello my friend. I hope you all have room for one more.

Your cynical and poetic logic is alive and well sir. A wonderfully posed premise.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-03-18 09:35 PM

majnu, a very well done senryu.
I enjoyed.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

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