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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Yucatan The ghosts had swirled and whispered, Konrad had bent his head to listen, then he slipped through his fog, back north, toward the Yucatan. Dana’s anticipation of his coming was not for some two weeks, so she would not be missing him yet. Some of the terrain he passed through had attempted with some difficulty to urbanize, compliments of USA Today. He had slowed to read an AP article of another Konrad, a geochemist who gave reasons for the dead and gone; he thought of Dana and her need to dig through the ruins, raising Mayan ghosts from their drought, which had collapsed their civilization. Konrad knew drought. It was that which gave him reason to dart to the fog in his mind, where things would be cool and moist, where he might hide his feelings in the gray, and muffle his words in hoary mist. But where he went to escape gave rise to his ghosts, giving them a place to stay, and he knew it was possible that they were behind the trees here, in their jungle, waiting for him to make one slip or catch his boot in the undergrowth of his mind. ~*~ http://www.msnbc.com/news/884939.asp?0dm=C13KT&cp1=1#BODY [This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-16-2003 10:21 AM).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Woderful story, Sunshine! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ooh that's haunting! Well done! It's purely brilliant to see that such a distant and academic pursuit could be a metaphor for something so close and personal. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I like your version best Karilea ... you add a haunting side ... a human side, to the report ... giving it something most readers can relate to ... especially those in drought stricken areas  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I agree, smooth use of metaphor here. (I like things layered...) and you just reminded me that I should be sketching today!  Enjoyed this, and you lady, are one diverse poet! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
loved this ghost story! Reminds me a bit of some things I remember by Redfield(?) Celestine Prophecy loved this one on many levels |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Konrad knew drought. It was that which gave him reason to dart to the fog in his mind, where things would be cool and moist, where he might hide his feelings in the gray, and muffle his words in hoary mist.' When I saw the title I was hoping....!!!! Kacy's right, this does have a Celestine Prophecy feel to it. Very cool Kari! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
waiting for him to make one slip or catch his boot in the undergrowth of his mind. Yikes!! And then? And then? Wonderful!! hugs to you, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Whats making this so cool is that you are dipping your ink into many wells of inspire for this and taking us on many journeys as you lead us to the destination of Dana. Landscaped murals of words...very very cool  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Excellent story, Karilea. Very interesting, as well as the link you provided. Thank you...  "Love makes the world go around" ~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (03-16-2003 01:36 PM).] |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Beautiful!  |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..Sunshine../\..very good poem; grabs one and doesn't let go..much enjoyed.. ../\..Spiros -----------------calm--------- |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...really liked the last few lines...James |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Konrad knew drought. It was that which gave him reason to dart to the fog in his mind, where things would be cool and moist, where he might hide his feelings in the gray, and muffle his words in hoary mist. says a great deal about the character..and an excellent use of a single passage to build not only an implied history but to set future references to one word and the reader that follows..know what it means... good stuff Sunnyone |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wonderfully layered, even the mist has substance. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This made me wonder, as many of your writings do, if I have time to read and reread them 'til they are mine and I never forget them. Well done! KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This is really interesting. I feel as if I have come into the middle of a complex story. Is there more to this? |
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