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kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2003-03-15 12:47 PM

you held your hand out
for the candy and
waited for it to be delivered

but you are not a child

you are middle-aged,
a participant of an assimilation program
to familiarise with your society,
having spent too much quality time
in a mental institution

and I am a spectator,
mourning for
the child in you
trapped in a grown-up's body,
too shaken to do anything else

[This message has been edited by kaile (03-15-2003 01:11 PM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-03-15 05:54 PM

Did you write this for a friend of mine?
An interesting write, left me pondering.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

2 posted 2003-03-16 06:21 AM

thanks for the pondering...that's what i hope my work to achieve..

sorry to hear about your friend though

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

3 posted 2003-03-16 09:52 AM

it is a step that is difficult for many to take I think and I have never experienced a mental institution except for acting in a student film at the douglas here 4 years ago. Not quite the same is it.I think that man gets into a rut especially when it comes to the austere environments of these so called institutions, but if he has had a number of years of a balanced/nuturing family life behind him or her it should be easier to make that step towards reconditioning so that he can then be a happy functional individual and not just functional.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

4 posted 2003-03-16 11:12 AM

Kaile,

The more I read this, the more I have to read it. Your first three lines set the stage. I just come away from this with the thought of a fully broken human being. Either brain-washed, or harmed so greatly left only with the whipped-puppy personality of one too abused to do more than hold out hand...not knowing if it will be smacked or petted, but knowing the rule.

Good write. Provoked much thinking, feeling, and wondering....

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

5 posted 2003-03-16 12:13 PM

There are so many children
in the best and worst of ourselves.

I love your take on it...
and the title too, Kaile!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-03-16 12:37 PM

Kaile, this is so sad to me. There are more in this world with mental problems that most know about. Some can disquise those problems very well, until they have a complete breakdown. I know someone just like this.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-03-16 12:42 PM

I can relate...I think of a friend I know.

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