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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-03-15 04:46 AM

A whimper
a whine,
one more
half hearted
scratch
upon your
door

maybe ..
just maybe
you'll let me in

rolled paper lessons
guilt bowl drinks
tale chase vertigo

Layers
I've grown
never enough
to stave off
the profound chill
of silence
and neglect
my gift
for
obedience?

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-15-2003 05:01 AM).]

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

1 posted 2003-03-15 05:03 AM

your words
so striking
chilling to the bones
with cold reality
its axe
plunges from years of ache

You wow me. this has got to be one of my favourites from you my friend.

bbent
Senior Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 521
Alaska

2 posted 2003-03-15 05:52 AM

Time to shop for a new owner??? Enjoyed.

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

3 posted 2003-03-15 07:32 AM

No living creature
should be treated
thus...

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2003-03-15 11:13 AM

Oh this touched my heart. Stabbed it, actually. Wow.
Sandra

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2003-03-15 11:20 AM

This is so well written, keeping the theme all the way through.

I like:

"Tail chase vertigo"

This is interesting and think we all can relate in some way, at some time.

Enjoy your talent,

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-03-15 11:51 AM

Raph - this one got me good . . . I sit and find myself . . . speechless - for once . . .
it just HIT me
as always amazing xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-15-2003 11:56 AM).]

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

7 posted 2003-03-15 01:27 PM

Gemma thank you so much, i'm honoured sharing an entrance and these pages with you.

bbent lol yes yes but where to look?

Elan so very true

Sandra thank you kindly and, all apologies, didn't mean to stab, my words can seem serrated..

Thank you Pat sweet of you to say

Thanks Sue, late night purge..felt a sudden pang of emptiness

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2003-03-15 02:00 PM

I have come back to comment Raph because I really didnt explain how this hit me in two ways:

one - that pang ahhhh - am so tired of it myself and reminded me of Bear - my lab . . .

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