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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~*~*~*~ Slanting across the sand where rays of sunlight beam lying horizontally braced against the breeze. Brushing summer highlights that comb along the shore skirting underneath lying in the curvature. Rising with the tides fanning out across the sea basking warm in the rapport turning tan lines over intimately. ~*~*~*~*~ |
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DarkSide_Blues Junior Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 41Fl, Usa. |
Excellent! I love the rhythm of it, and it's even better concidering I'm going to the beach tommorow! I'm one large tan line though, being a near albino. ^_^;...Enjoyed it very much, and you're a rather awesome writer! Looking forward to more! ~Blues. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like those tan lines...James |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice work Blues... subtly erotic...and smooth.. need some lotion? Don't want you to burn you know.  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Blues - I love this! Love the title too! Putting this one into my library. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Now that's one stretch of sand I'd definitely lie upon.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
What a beautiful poem to read when you tired. lol. But I would probably like it better when I'm sleeping. lol. Nah, forreal, great job!  Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lori hon this one just oozes with sensuality, and I think it is perfect!! Adored it...  I must have had my momma's will |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, This is so well written. Subtly sensual with great imagery. Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Uh-huh, Lori...I agree with all the others said, and for me it's a too.Hugs, Ethel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Lori...I think if you curve into the sand enough, the wind just passes by and only the sun favors you. Enjoyed this!! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Gads! Got here a bit late, it seems. Gotta agree with the crowd....All that's been said. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Subtle sensuousness. You certainly got the men's attention with this one! Have a sunny day! EA |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I knew I was asking for it, given the title and all. It's just that I'm missing the warmth that color my days during the summer months. I've an affinity for the sun that goes way back. Thanks for all your nice replies everyone. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
nude beach anyone? ah, yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hey Michele~ You caught me in between turns! Thanks for reading and for sharing your raw humor. I really need the hedge to grow in my backyard so I can get away with it. It? |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This is great! Thanks, Eric |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, how I'd love to be there right now, sweet friend, I dream of living right by the ocean and always enjoying the sun and rain! (kiss on cheek) This is a beautifully uplifting write, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOL.. now Blues... no need to get shy... I won't look when I put the lotion on.. promise.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
now this is damn good! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - I'm on the way to the beach. Those tan lines, h'mmmmmmmm... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Ericc...it's getting better all the time. Oh Noah~ That picture is so me, wish I could frame it. Thank you so much for choosing that for me. You mean to say I can trust you on that Cpat? Watch out now! Gotta love my day off when the sun is shining on me. Thanks Dixie girl~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi BC~ and thanks for the read. Don't leave home without packing up your cooler. You might ask Cpat if he's willing to share his sunscreen. I don't know, he might get a little wishy washy but it never hurts to ask. Trust me, (that's what he lead me to believe anyway) |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lori~ A lovely way to celebrate the end of winter & the coming of Summer. I hope the sun always shines on you as your words brighten up our days...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (03-14-2003 07:10 PM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
NO TAN lines allowed....LOL well not for me anyway! NICE sensual write lori....heart hugsssss... Lauren~ Here I am |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Cute write Lori...much enjoyed the smiles tonight! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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