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DarkSide_Blues Junior Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 41Fl, Usa. |
It'll probably seem kind of..uh..bleak..But hey..How can you appreciate Life without acknowledging death? This was dedicated to my grandfather, whom kept saying on his death bed, that he was ready to go home. Age Melancholy thoughts so dreary, Blackest night turned to queery, Eyes of death that I know fear he, Takes my soul away. So I run to farther corners, Past the black clad colored mourners, To the home town I'm a foreigner, Chase the break of day. Know nought I what grimly seeks, Makes human thoughts and minds so meek, See a dark hued shadow sleek, Golden life turned grey. Run no more as I shall tire, Spirit lacking the fiery fire, Death I have grown to admire, Take me home I say. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Darkside - never bleak - words from your heart: Run no more as I shall tire, Spirit lacking the fiery fire, Death I have grown to admire, Take me home I say. This is powerful - the ending says it all - we all feel like that sometimes . . . I will to when that time approaches xxoo - TY for sharing [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-10-2003 04:26 AM).] |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
This is excellent. I like your use of words... not the everyday kind! And I like the scene you set up. I look forward to more of your work! the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
 Stephen, this poem, is.. Well just that good. And just like littlewing said, that ending was very powerful. The words you used were really nice, But im sure some didnt understand. I almost didnt. Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Yes the power is in the last line ... when you call it HOME, fear is gone! Beautiful. Margherita |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
enjoyed the meaning and rhyme pattern and for some reason you reminded me of Poe's Raven *s M. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Sorry, just forgot to add this to my lib.. Oh, and hurry up and get home man, and then get on icq, lol. I need to talk to ya! Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
powerful ending, to be called home. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I think it is wonderful...sad but beautiful |
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DarkSide_Blues Junior Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 41Fl, Usa. |
Thank you all berry much for your comments. Means alot to me when people actually take the time to read my stuff! ^_^ And lol, I didn't get home till 3:00 A.m. Connel. I'll talk to you on Monday or Tuesday though. Lol XD. Ja ne! |
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DarkSide_Blues Junior Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 41Fl, Usa. |
just figured out how to use the library. XD lol |
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