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You Were the Ocean
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You Were the Ocean |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
You Were the Ocean You were, before light And the Sea, the unchanging Sea I sink in this moment of self What course, what winds to follow The searcher, and only horizons No Islands, again Fires of heaven… shine me a warming shore… Erin’s welcome hidden And I regret not knowing it Or never touching you Yes never touching you But you touched me… More, more then you may know A fire rekindled, was almost spent Yes this voyage had moments and oh what moments… …could I but tell Still the water is calm the wind so smooth so warm and the only Port I seek eludes me this life Erin’s shore is far… far from the emerald Isle far from the fire pits The night, like the unchanging sea so faithful in its hollow torture The wind is a prankster like a jester bestowing uncertainty I wait enthralled, expecting the trick always searching always searching… James Parker Haley Feb 2002 |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"And I regret not knowing it Or never touching you Yes never touching you But you touched me… More, more then you may know" Parker... you make a girls heart swoon....  |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Erin's shore will always call you home, my friend... What a beautiful and haunting poem...I'm so glad that it was here to read...thank you for sharing it! Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm amazed! loved the ending! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Parker, loved these two lines The wind is a prankster like a jester bestowing uncertainty |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I felt the effect of the ocean by the manner in which you laid down your lines. It was like being swept along the length of the poem by the rhythmic back and forth motion of the waves...Lovely on all levels and very much enjoyed this reading experience! May your day be a great one! Earth Angel |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Open and deep, the images that paint an awestruck sound upon me. Excellent. ThisDiamond |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A very beautiful and excellently written poem. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh James, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, this almost had me envisioning the gorgeous Enerald Isle and wondering how it must feel to swim off the shores there! (big hugggsssssss) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet James, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Parker Well done, enjoyed. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Filled with longing, Park. One of your best, truly. Your hiatus hasn't hurt your writing. Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
the_loner_23, thank you very much. SEA, yes and you can make me swoon with your ink...  Sunnyone, thank you for that comment. The longer I take to visit the more I feel like I'm missing something important in my life. passing shadows, thank you. (smiles) kaile, thank you me too. Earth Angel, thank you glad you enjoyed. ThisDiamond, thank you. garysgirl, thank you. Noah, as always your too kind. Seymour, thank you. Corinne, thank you, i'm not too sure about this one. I've been away from writing too long. thanks sweet poet. Parker |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hmmm..I like this a lot..a lot.  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Just chiming in to vote for this one - forgot to do it the first time. it's very good, Park, very heart-felt. Cor |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'And I regret not knowing it Or never touching you Yes never touching you But you touched me… More, more then you may know A fire rekindled, was almost spent Yes this voyage had moments and oh what moments… …could I but tell Still the water is calm the wind so smooth so warm and the only Port I seek eludes me this life' Took a few lines for me to get the feel of this, then it clicked and flowed. Really liked it a lot. |
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Quiet Acquiescence Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 70somewhere out here |
Beautiful, just beautiful. ~*~Courage is wings~*~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Poet deVine... thank you alot. Corinne, sweet poet thank you I trust your opinion... ...Oh sail with me to County Cork, on a maiden voyage of gentle seas and run thru the mire and the mists, on a lover's mystical journey... (Poet Known) Duncan, its probably like the sea up and down. lol thanks muchly for the reply. Quiet Acquiescence, thank you and welcome to passions. Park [This message has been edited by Parker (02-18-2003 09:24 PM).] |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
this was very beautiful! I like it. i do i do!!!  |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Well done. Superb images, and a language all its own. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"Fires of heaven… shine me a warming shore…" ...powerful imagery and desperate longing! I felt out on the waves of your emotions - well written! Rf |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Fires of heaven… shine me a warming shore… Erin’s welcome hidden And I regret not knowing it Or never touching you Yes never touching you But you touched me… More, more then you may know A fire rekindled, was almost spent Yes this voyage had moments and oh what moments… …could I but tell Still the water is calm the wind so smooth so warm and the only Port I seek eludes me this life ==================================== ahhhh the sea makes for such a lovely backdrop to thy melancholy muse. Love the phrasing in this P-man. Heart-felt writing .... hang the moon groovy guy...we moths love to swoon " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is beautiful, but sad. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
beautifully done |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ohmygosh! Into the book with this one! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Jesus, Joseph and Mary, where did you dig that Irish jig up? You never cease to surprise, Park. Yea, I post that annually, on St. Patty's day, don't 'ya know? Thanks for the smile! Cor |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
beautiful!!!! Charisma |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
LOVELY.....Yep I want this in the book!!!! Bridgette |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Just excellent choice for submission Parker, you certianly get my vote. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Beautiful writing. Most beautiful! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Enjoyed the read very much... It's always a sweet treat2come across a gem penned by you Parker... Smiles2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Just beautiful! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
exquisite work, Parker... regards, sudhir |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like this, Parker - It's a good choice for submission...  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A sad quest, with nobility and stupidity. I so understand this poem. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Parker - I like it, my vote is cast... BC |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Still the water is calm the wind so smooth so warm and the only Port I seek eludes me ************************************* How beautifully written! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Parker...this is just beautiful. It's so great to read you again. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
a  wow such an awesome write!Poetry is: |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sigh...and click.. you oughtta be published, yanno that? |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Beautiful! You have my vote |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
As always, your romantic nature wraps itself into each and every word you pen, whether there be sadness, glee, or whatever.... awesome...as to be expected from you.. hugs, g "laughter is the shortest distance between two people" - victor borge |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I know this is late but thanks all for your replies. My mind has been elsewhere lately and with an inactive muse these months.  anyway thanks again. Parker |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad this made it, I love this one! |
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