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Don't pass me by
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Don't pass me by |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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.....Don't pass me by tease my eyes kiss but miss string me further gaze for beauty kill your time sweep the distance up and over flavour each blink watch me sink further up than down reverse the order slow my senses fine tuned synchronised beneath the before magnify the now impose your butterflies over my skin rush the beats inhale my smoke grip fingertips close each worry silk me over crease the perfection don't pass me by...... learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. [This message has been edited by gemjop (03-07-2003 05:18 PM).] |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
very interesting poem, you did a great job of setting the tempo. I like it very much. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
gemjop - silk me over, now I like that, and this poem... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Great rhythm. Enjoyable read. Margherita |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Gemma, I too, loved the rhythm and the words. this just reads right down the page with no breath taken. I like the silk line as well. Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Wow! My kind of read... I love rhythm and this has it. I like your use of phrases, it all works well together. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
words just flowed! I love this! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Made me think of that Beatles song..."Don't pass me by, don't make me cry, don't make me blue, for you know darling I'm still in love with you"...James |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Glad I didn't pass this by! I love the flow and rhythm. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey girl  Looks like I missed this one yesterday...OOOPPSSS. Well, I didn't this time...LOL and I liked, as always.....  Hugs, Ethel Mae Bye  |
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sweetwater Member
since 2002-12-16
Posts 178Perth |
this is great!... the word flow so smoothly.. and I like the way it's set too. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
rkcraig- thanks, glad you liked. xxx Bill- YOUR words silk me over. thankyou kind sir.  Margherita- Thankyou , glad you enjoyed. xx Pat, Thanks as always for your comments and support.  Ice queen- Thankyou very much. xxx Dixie- I do so appreciate your forever supportive comments that you never fail to give. so glad u liked. James Michael- You hit the nail on the head, I stole the title to inspire a poem. I LOVE THE BEATLES!!! xxx Sea of okc- i'm glad you didnt, thankyou. xxx Ethel Mae, thanks for stopping by, and making me smile sweetheart. Sweetwater- glad you enjoyed, thanks for reading and replying. xx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I enjoyed this one, gemma... thank you! |
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