Open Poetry #25 |
Goodbye |
Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Daddy why must you go? Was it something I did Should I have done it before? Mommy says that my Daddy is back now But isn't that you? He wasn't here when I was sick, Daddy, Why can't I be with you? But my sister gets to go with you sometimes Daddy, please take me When I was sick and I called He never came, it was always you Daddy says that he is my Daddy Why not you? Is it because I didn't clean my room Or because I ran in the house? Yes, I know I would visit him In the summer if he felt the need But, Daddy, I didn't need to visit you You were always here and you never left me Mommy says I can't call anymore What did I do, Daddy? OK, I'll hang up now Mommy says I have to go I think I'm in trouble Daddy tells me he loves me But Daddy, I love you. Sorry for the downer guys, but I was already here and had to put this down. [This message has been edited by Ringo (03-06-2003 11:52 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is true about some guys. But not all guys are like this. Awesome write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ringo, this is sad. I could almost here the little child pleading. Hugs, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (03-07-2003 01:47 AM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
well written thru the child's eyes, painful times when life should just be a playground |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, I just wanna give you a great big huuuug!... Earth Angel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very well expressed...you can feel the ache. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ringo, A poignant write, enjoyed. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Bradly, I send many angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, I know this feeling but know he will always love you so much and wishes too for re-uniting soon enough, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ringo, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Aching, excellent write. *S* |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hi Bradly So often it is the children who suffer and feel they are to blame in these situations. Your words were very moving. Take care.....Sue I am in motion |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Very enjoyed poem.. I took this one to heart! Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Once again, I thank you for your most kind words... It honestly helps with a difficult situation. Hugs to all... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is heartwrenching. I am impressed. ... echoes of the challenges of real life. Love, Margherita |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
sometimes sad is all there is...no need to apologize |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This is a very touching write..and we write them best when we are "right there". Well done. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very, very sad poem, yet written so well. Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Brad - sorry getting late on this one - Goddd - I know this - that telephone - ughhh - I often think these things to myself - how responsible we are for the life and belief system of one small child - scares me some days - it does nicely done - xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
So touching, so sad, so vote worthy. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
So sad.... Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
You captured the feelings very well! Heart-wrenching and real. Worthy of a vote, certainly. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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