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sorry mr. e.e. cummings
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sorry mr. e.e. cummings |
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noah j Member
since 2003-03-05
Posts 82on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair |
"water ballon" she said slowly and without any kind of breath "In him;I see the blind inertia of a SWOLLEN water balloon about to b u r s t on the face of the lonely man SIttIng in the corner; dimly lit by the half broken lights of an old coke machine." |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I loved the imagery Cold hands means a warm heart |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
this makes me grin! I want to see another poem on what he does AFTER the water baloon bursts in his face! wonderful imagery here. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i agree, awesome imagery...mr cummings would be proud of this one... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes... nicely done. I enjoyed |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great imagery and very well written, thanks for sharing it with us  [This message has been edited by Marshalzu (03-07-2003 08:09 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...I can actually see him! Have a wonderful day! Earth Angel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great imagery...nicely done! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh my gosh, I saw him too, reminds me of my own chemistry days, hehehe! (big hugggssssss) This has my vote, sweet friend, I love that final BOOM, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Noah, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
noah j I agree with Capt, nicely done. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
far and wee |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well done! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Noah, i really like what you have to offer..here's a bump for you... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
yes...the imagery is quite good in this one nj, and ee would probably smile now go fix that silly typo 'balloon' and let this thing soar [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (03-16-2003 10:36 AM).] |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
smiling at Alyssa..I had the same thought ~A~ |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
have I voted for this?, thought I had but if not I am voting now! Jason |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Noah, this really made your readers want to see the next scene. Very good.. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nicely done! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
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