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Short shots in the dark.
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Short shots in the dark. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Short Shots in the dark The Product of Strict Editing. Think how freedom feels, Pretend that you believe that you can feel that free. 24/11/02 Lets Escape. I fake my death you should as well it’s quite easy and I should know I’m faking yours too. 8/12/02 Bitter. Don’t say that she is sweet ‘cause she wreaks of vanity. December 2002 Poem Written in the light of a drunken night in a silent dark room. In the dark, I focus on the light. 22/02/03 My Violent Bedtime Stories [This message has been edited by Marshalzu (03-06-2003 06:11 PM).] |
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Amara Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158East of the moon, west of the sun. |
I, for one, am usually partial to longer poems, but these are nice! I do think the last is more of a saying than a poem, though. But nice! That's what we, as heroes, do. We live as if the world were like it should be, to show the world what it could be. |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
Enjoyed your write!! and thoughts!! >>phantom poet<< |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
loved them... "Lets Escape. I fake my death you should as well it’s quite easy and I should know I’m faking yours too. 8/12/02" omg you are cracking me up...this by far was my fav...thank you...helen |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I think this is the first of your poetry I've read. I went to your website listed above and read a couple of those. Very good poetry. Have you posted any here, and I've just missed seeing them? Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for the replies, I know they are not nearly as good as some of my other work but I was inspired by a local poet who I have been reading, he had quite a few short poems so I thought I would give them a try. Once again thanks for the comments they really are appreciated |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Lets Escape. I fake my death you should as well it’s quite easy and I should know I’m faking yours too. 8/12/02 yep..have to agree... my favorite of the offering... enjoyed this..and all.. a great deal.. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
quote: I've posted a few in Open but not many, normally I post in teen but I've sort of moved over here now . Just wondering but did you find my website easy to navigate as I have had some trouble with it?Thanks for replying |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I liked them all, but I prefer the first two. These are very cool. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool stuff! enjoyed them a lot! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow, I didn't expect to see you in here I must say that I did like these... short seems to work with you for some reason. I got the feeling that these were all written while you were emotional and / or bitter, and I like the product of that. You use a lot of... I dunno, dark imagery / emotions maybe it is? Whatever it is, I like it, and I'd like to see more. The more I reread these, the more I like the way you work with short poems. The more it seems to suit you, probably because you're not using lots and lots of descriptions, but rather getting straight to the point of what you want to say. Bravo, my friend, I think you may have found one of your niches. I am truly impressed with these. Sometimes you find a friend where once there wasn't one. Sometimes you find a love where once there was a friend. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Yes, the light is where we should all focus upon and use the token to reflect the light across that room! (sigh) I am happy to see you posting in Open, sweet friend, I've seen Teen and it can be so quiet there, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Andrew, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-08-2003 05:32 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...james |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for the replies |
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