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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2003-02-16 01:43 PM

This isn't my best work, but I'm trying to wade through this end to get to the better part of the water.

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The words are there
shrinkwrapped in silence
and there is nothing sharp enough
to free them.
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Time gains another advantage.
You still procrastinate your freedom
while I live mine.
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You have my heart
but how can you expect my body
unless you come to claim it?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I will apologize
but I will not listen to the angry fist of your voice
damage the walls further.
Please
Heed the word control
before I loose faith.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

SARCASM BREEDS A BROKEN HEART, and I have enough cracks. Please stop breaking me!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-02-16 01:55 PM

you capture the thoughts well...

I enjoyed

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-02-16 02:01 PM

Love reading your words Jenn.
Wish you would post more often.
You always tell it like it is.
Wonderful work.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-02-16 02:18 PM

Well, this poem didnt have much meaning to me... Sorry . Butthe words are good.. But just didnt mean anything to me.. =(

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

Albert J. Allie
Senior Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 512
Queens NY

4 posted 2003-02-16 06:08 PM

I like i do i do!!

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

5 posted 2003-02-16 06:14 PM

...missing you

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

6 posted 2003-02-16 06:36 PM

Temptress - you write your thoughts very well...

BC

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2003-02-16 06:55 PM

the things that come into your mind. . .

it's nice to read your work again my friend . . . I have missed it. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

8 posted 2003-02-17 09:35 AM

There are thoughts that come into the mind. There are also thoughts that should never enter in the first place.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

9 posted 2003-02-17 10:08 AM

Keen eyes,
incisive wit.
Will she be a marksman
or a lover, a temptress or
vixen?

Can't remember the term for it -- when a hitter gets four home runs in one game.

If this isn't your best, then your best must be fine indeed. I'll watch for it with keen anticipation.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (02-17-2003 10:11 AM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

10 posted 2003-02-17 10:19 AM

Jennifer, I feel like some of the others do...I've missed you, friend.....

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And....this is a very good poem......I also understood what you were saying.
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I know you're here when we don't see you, but we would like to see you post more. I read your work a lot, even when I don't reply.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

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