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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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I guess I’m doomed forever to this fake reality And I’m doomed to find out questions And to questions every plea. Buts it’s ok to wonder truth, Just never go astray. Walk the path and see the shoulder But keep walking the right way. And I guess I’m doomed forever To this fake reality. Forever, just this lifetime, While I live in-sanity. I’ve peaked to shadow’s spotlight Spoken volumes of unrest Questions still keep coming But I admit it, I digress... And I guess I’m doomed forever To this fake reality. To the stars of day and light of night, Peculiar sights to see. But I don’t mind the questions, Nor the doom for all obscure It’s just the fakeness of your caring, And the hands… still never sure. - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (03-04-2003 10:11 PM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, "the stars of day and the light of night" can only describe migraine.... the last line threw me....but, I am unskilled at 'reading' poetry insofar as layering and such, and symbolic meanings. I liked the very powerful, heartfelt poem. Hugs and love, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Pat, yep, and their pretty stars and light shows, in an underwater beauty drive you crazy and suffocate you kind of way. ...must be in a strange mood, anyway..! Couldn't figure out how I wanted to form the last line, but I meant it to mean someone who because they don't really care, always hesitates to hold your hand. Saying that bother me more than any migraine could. Ah ok, bed time for Alyssa. Thanks for the reply, and don't worry, I've found you to be quiet good at reading into poems. Hugs and love.. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, Thanks for taking the time to explain. I did kind of think that is what you meant about the hands. Some people simply cannot be demonstrative. My father was one. Very, very reserved. Seems like the ones we need love from the most are the ones who can't give it. It is the way he was raised. Sad!!! Hope you can sleep. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Wow. I'm breathless. I love this so incredibly much. I'm near tears...oh man...I have to write this down. I can't thank you enough for the move you've created inside of me. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
All I can manage to say is awesome write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oooooo, this hit home.... |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
"I guess I’m doomed forever to this fake reality" Great line. Another masterful work |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Pat, thanks for the second reply. Your right, and my father is the same, very businessman like. Complete left sided thinker... but I love him lots! And I know he loves me, even without showing it. KoKo, I'm astonished to have left anyone breathless. And with tears, wow, though I hope they aren't sad tears. I want to see whatever write this inspired of you! wahoo.Loner, well what you've said is certainly enough for my thanks and so I give it! Thank you!Dixie, I could have guessed it would. Besides, you like anything with sad content and.. most of my poems have that!  just take care of yourself, and thank you.Ringo, think that was my favorite line too, thats why I said it three times lol. Glad you find it masterful, again, I'm honored! No master at all, thats for sure. Thank you Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
I loved this peice because of the powerful feeling in it. Or maybe it's my own feelings. I've been here and it definitly stirred up some major emotions. I wrote it down and re-read it about 3 times today. It never gets old. This is a great, great write. Fantastic! I wish you would think about it for the book I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
koko, wow, I'm stil amazed that you'd like it.. especially so much. Just honored... thanks for the compliments and all Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Alyssa, I was about to act the devil's advocate and ask you how can you be so sure that your reality is fake...the closing lines told me the answer duly...nice work here...kept me on my toes...hee |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Kaile, thank you very much surprising to see you on your toes! lol I would have been ready to answer the questions if you'd played devil's advocate too. Thanks again, for taking the time to read and reply!Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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