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Trilobite
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Trilobite Scrabble across sun-blasted shale, beneath the lizard breath of thermals hovering hot along the hillside: Kneel here. Or here... Here. Or here, beneath this sere, sun scalded cliff, to choose among the rocks, or turn a random stone out of this randomness of stones. Choose here. Or here... Here. Or here, a slender vein of shale, mud stasis under granite over gneiss, so dark, uncanny soft that city hands could break, thrust into time, pull treasure here. Or here… Here. This dry square stone, chip-edged, pulled upward with a mica shimmer through the waves of earth-remembered seas-- and yet too smooth: Nothing died here. Or here. A blank and anaerobic page, that opens to no carbon trace of life lined out, no graceful frozen curve to mark a distant passing in the tide of time; but in this stone are layers, layers in the layers, layers even city hands could open here. Or here... Here. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...we take for granted the layers that have built and fallen around us, here and here, the crumble of time and the rock is not. This was intense and thoughtful. I admire what you do. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The stone grinds against the grain and turns the pebbles into sand, hence, the layers upon layers, upon layers. Here, here~ you go! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, this is a very interesting poem. I love the way you write. "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very thought-provoking |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now I see Martie's inspiration... well done, Sir... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
deep within the layers of words, the poem is real good |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice.... love the imagery..and the idea... the layer built into the poem..allow the reader to take it were they want and apply it to their life as they see it... good stuff Ed... very good |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
had ma mouth open when reading this...wow..like this a lot.  in 2 my library i think.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A blank and anaerobic page, that opens to no carbon trace of life lined out, no graceful frozen curve to mark a distant passing in the tide of time; but in this stone are layers, layers in the layers, layers even city hands could open here. Or here... Here. I find myself looking out for your work ratleader. I love what you do when you do this. I understand why Martie was inspired by this poem. adding this to my library. Maree  |
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TaureauRouge Junior Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 26A mass of land between two oceans |
Human perspectives can be the many layers but ultimately, there is that single fossil, truth, which is evident in all layers. That's my take at least. Excellent job  "I should have been a pair of ragged claws/ Scuttling over the floors of silent seas"-T.S. Eliot |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ratleader - many thoughts here of what I read... BC |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
 ... The face is self explainatory Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
I read this at first just because you had written it... I read it a second time because I wanted to be sure I understood it... I read it the third time just to simply enjoy it agin. Great write. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, I'm glad some folks have noticed this one -- it's all too often that the ones I like best fall straight through to the bottom of the pile..... Does my heart good to hear that somebody likes one that I think of as one of my best. And I did find a trilobite fossil that day -- not a very good one, but darned well good enough for city hands to pick up.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I think we indeed take that solid layer for granted, dearest friend, we just keep escavating until we find we've duggen ourselves into a deep hole and can't get out, where the foundation is simply there and no shovels are needed to unravel it! (big hugggssssss) This is a very intriguing write, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I've been looking for the trilobite in my own writing....I see layers containing eons, without substance. And each, pretty shallow. Where IS that thing(s) that needs to be said?! Sorry to vomit all over your post Ed, just got me thinking..... Ed [This message has been edited by wranx (03-09-2003 05:25 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wat, wat you mean, wranx? Yours is some of the best and most consistent stuff that hits this site.... Take it away, and we'd have to put road cones around the hole to prevent a disaster! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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