Open Poetry #25 |
I found Jesus on the radio |
jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I found Jesus on the radio did she do it, did she do it, did she do it like me? did she do it do it do it like me ? try as I might the radio drowns out nothing done me wrong songs only add insult to injury in this darkest of times what care I that this pain is not terminal? within night’s inky stain I cannot alone abide one station after another I flip - endure this night somehow I must...the static mocks and rips at my ears... did she did she do it like me? did you think of me when the taste of her quenched your enflame and...no please don’t tell me no more words to fuel my fire the battle rages already beyond control did she do it like me? did she do it did she did she ...what is this? a new station on the FM dial? Jesus? Jesus on the radio? make it through they say by holding a hand imagined? Faith in something I cannot see in something I do not understand? they sing of a Savior of Hope eternal of pain transferred and someone to help me bear this burden someone who loves me without reason they sing to Jesus and the words drop softly down my cheeks did she do it do it do it like me? tears cleanse and purify tears turn into healing rain forgiveness takes possession betrayal’s grip is loosed I can stand no more to my knees I fall Jesus hears my cry He takes hold of my hand He bids me sing I fine tune a clear connection to Him alone I sing my pain and the darkness oppressing I sing of my need for a life unbroken thankfulness rises I breathe deep and cry out his Love his Grace his Mercy abundant slowly I sing back my sanity I sing the long night gone with peace serene my song greets the light of morn [This message has been edited by jellybeans (03-04-2003 01:57 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ouch... big ouch... in your usual fashion..you capture very well the anguish of such times... powerful write... painful experience being written about all well done |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
First of all, great title. This piece is very powerful and has teriffic rhyme scheme. I loved it. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you cpat...can take no credit...just words I needed to get out of my head...thank you for seeing beyond seeing... rcraig....thank you...I do not usually ryhme...actually did not know I did, but if it reads that way to you, then I am pleased |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, lady... the questions you really don't want answered just batter your brain... until another refrain offers the peace that seemed merely a myth only a moment ago. *S* This is excellent writing!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans...I could hear this so vividly, like a scream, then a hymn. Amazing write! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
jellybeans Your dialogue is as sweet as jellybeans, enjoyed. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
JB, Simply superb. Capturing the insane, tortured feelings of betrayal and the calm serenity of prayer all in one poem is awesome. What a roller coaster ride of emotions. Such talent! Heart hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
jelly - I am there with you - the same thoughts like a nail in my brain - did she do it - Oh my - yeah that hurts - but just keep listening k? I have to (and I dont mean the radio) love the line about the words falling . . . beautiful - from the same point of view and experience - you conveyed this perfectly xxoo |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
suthern…questions….hmmm….shouldn’t they make the question mark illegal? lol…guess that is impossible…thank you lady…sigh…sigh…sigh Martie….you read it just the way it came into existence, thank you thank you Seymour…you never fail to compliment me Pat, thank you lady….wish it was talent, it is no more than my insanity winding down the page littlewing, I knew this would not be for everyone, but if you are there, or have been there…it speaks to the pain…am sorry you have pain for it to speak to, appreciate your comments |
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