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Poetry Verse And Stanzas |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
P aradise of humanities reasoning O verlooking the horizon of timeless quotes E xcelling winds of spirited minds T raumatic leaps prancing in unbounded freedoms R aining in moisture of tears understanding Y outhful blossoms in endless fragrances V oracious appetite of infinite possibilities E nergetic vibrations from intoxicated lips R anting in the haunted meanings of living S torming thoughts, exhilarating hearts E nding in a heavenly sigh A nnealed hardness from surviving depression N otes dancing in the music of self survival D ynamic feelings of preservation S treaming emotions riding roller coasters T antalizing caresses of inspired awareness A ngelic aberrations of fellow writers N uzzling you as if a lover Z apped meanings carrying you on endless journeys A bsorbed tranquility, blanketed in peaceful solutions S tars twinkling within your own unique personality POETRY VERSE AND STANZAS Thought: Sometimes the more depressed a writer gets, the more therapeutic the words become, riding roller coasters of emancipated feelings. D.Lester Young 3/2/2003 Tuscaloosa, AL Copyright © D.Lester Young (White Eagle poetry) |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
interesting thoughts >>phantom poet<<< |
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TaureauRouge Junior Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 26A mass of land between two oceans |
I had to reread this poem a few times. Each line is nicely detailed, but I was a bit confused as to what the direct object was. In other words, the lines, though well written, didn't seem like complete thoughts to me. It is difficult to connect the lines in my head without a linking verb between. "Angelic aberrations of fellow writers Nuzzling you as if a lover" I liked this line I hope this critique helps you and I apologize for not being more composed. "I should have been a pair of ragged claws/ Scuttling over the floors of silent seas"-T.S. Eliot |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I enjoyed these thoughts tremendously, and they flowed smoothly before my eyes. But I especially was caught up in the 'thought' line at the end. A poet writes for many reasons, but I do agree that his/her own words can be a theraputic balm for a troubled heart and mind. Yes, I really enjoyed this one!! Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggggssssss) Oh David, I couldn't agree with you more, sweet friend, I went through severe depression as a child and almost didn't make it through, but now after being able originally to express all my darkest thoughts and tears, hesitating at first, I now write much more joyous than ever and more confidently also! (smiles) Always use your meantal freedom and write the best poetry you can, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Much enjoyed..very nicely done. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi DLY, and I don't usually reply twice, but this one deserves a special BRAVO!!!!! I love the way you re-formatted, it's brillant, and something that is really unique, my friend!! Excellent, in verse, thought and format.....you have another check in the box, although I am not sure if voting twice is allowed......  Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
OH..an acrostic!! Good job.  |
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