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Ratleader

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0 posted 2003-03-02 10:03 PM

Tornado

Who has seen the wind has seen
the Presence curdling the clouds, the
          heathen spasm arching
                screaming down,
                   blast trees and
                 barns rip coils
            of living grass,
        sling sod
    and mud
      against
        the face
               of
                God

Martie

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1 posted 2003-03-02 11:16 PM

Ed..It must be frightening, but your words hold something more sinister then the power of mother nature. I must try this form, though don't quite know how.

Ratleader

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2 posted 2003-03-02 11:30 PM

Well.... this one has only one rule -- that you make up all rules as you go along, specifically for that particular poem.

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Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

3 posted 2003-03-02 11:39 PM

Well done, nice format.The imagery was powerful.The format was new to me but never more appropriate.
Jason

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-03-03 12:12 PM

Damn this is brilliant

Midnitesun

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Gaia

5 posted 2003-03-03 12:16 PM

Smiling at your tornado watcher/chaser poetry. The visual imagery was enhanced by the swirling presentation. Well done!

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

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my own state

6 posted 2003-03-03 01:08 AM

there was a poem I sent to a tornado chaser
wish I thought of this form...it does have gusty impact!

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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7 posted 2003-03-03 02:18 AM

Rat - speechless . . . just amazing . . .
a lot of power in your words xxoo

passing shadows
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displaced

8 posted 2003-03-03 05:13 AM

Oh My! I can't even express how superb this is!

CSKpoet
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Island in Paradise

9 posted 2003-03-03 09:14 AM

Tis a gusty wind of wonderful
great job, Rat
enjoyed this much, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

Cpat Hair

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10 posted 2003-03-04 09:31 AM

very nicely done... form and words blended to give not only an impact of image..but a visual as well...
enjoyed

Marshalzu

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Lurking

11 posted 2003-03-04 09:33 AM

This is a truly wonderful poem, thanks for sharing

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

12 posted 2003-03-04 02:22 PM

It's a brutal act of nature,
when our world is rocked and
the walls come tumbling down.

Good depiction of the natural forces
that surround us.

Phantom Poet
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since 2003-03-03

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Arizona USA

13 posted 2003-03-04 02:32 PM

mother nature has her ways
>>phantom poet<<<

Robert Frazier
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14 posted 2003-03-04 02:40 PM

a perfect storm!

Rf

Krawdad
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15 posted 2003-03-04 02:53 PM

hey, it works

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

16 posted 2003-03-04 03:28 PM

This is amazing!
Love the presentation!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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