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Huan Yi
Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2007-04-24 07:19 PM


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In the war
And in those before
No soldier ever died
Squealing like a pig

It was shot in the head
There was no pain
At least that’s what was said
To the family back home

Yet since we’ve learned
That that was wrong
To keep from doing
Further harm

Let us try to fill you in
On the matter of the porno
We found in his locker


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Drauntz
Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
1 posted 2007-04-24 11:03 PM


it is only today
I wished you a wonderful day
now you get into angry
which will ruin your dream, sir.

a very good poem but it will be better if your anger has released through it. otherwise, write
more.

what a truth!

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