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Answers in Echoes |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
He climbed the mountain so high, so high that he might touch the sky, the sky so blue, with clouds floating by, by, good-bye he wishes them on their way, their way drifting from his hilltop viewing viewing the world in broad expansive glancing, glancing back to where he began the day, the day of a solitary task for doing, doing the climb to where the heavens are dancing dancing on mountain top top the mountain so high Gloom just a little word/form exercise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oh I like this! Does this "exercise" have a name? |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Munda, I’m glad you liked it. I don’t think it does, but there are many repeating forms, Some repeat entire lines, other ones just words or phrases. This sort of was inspired by Doreen Peri’s poem, but also by Some Chinese poetry I’ve been reading from the Tang Dynasty Which contained this subject. Gloom |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
if all excercise were this fun, I'd have it made  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Professor--I love it! Should be named after you! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What a great 'poetic' exercise... Free-metered Serpentine???  |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, hoot_owl_rn, Exercise is fun, if you go about it in that way. Glad you like this one of mine, that makes it fun for me. Thank you, Martie, If they did that, no one would write them, Pleased at the thought you give though. Thank you, Nan That’s a good name for it Gloom |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
You do it so well when you do a write of poetry Of poetry that you do so well My hear says, do more for me as I desire so well to see of your write of poetry when you do it so well. Thanks, Gloom, enjoyed! ((Gloom)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I had done one similiar to this style I don't know when, somewhere back in the archives, and I do like the way it sounds, especially when read aloud... well done, Professor! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Silver Streak, It’s nice to be appreciated for the effort put into my writing, Even on simple exercises. Thank you, Sunshine, I really hadn’t thought of the reading it out loud, But you may be correct, it might be a good form for reading out loud. I think the structure needs work, perhaps stricture meter And a rhyming between lines other than just the last with the echo. If you find you old one, please e-mail it to me. I’m sure I’ll find it interesting. Gloom |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Professor Gloom- This is wonderful! I absolutely LOVE it! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A very tasty tangy poem. Unusual form? I love the 'formlessness' of free flow. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh I loved this whatever it is called, and perhaps you invented something new? I like the way the words roll in my mind, and when you read it out loud it is even better as you can carry the last line to the next with audible emphasis, and it is so neat! Live today like it was your last day on earth! |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Professor - I enjoyed this exercise of word and verse very much. Dave |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Gloom...... I loved this write.... I felt a freedom not common in your writing... almost like you were smiling LOL : ) Connie |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, vlraynes, If my words have pleased you My poetry is a success. Thank you, Midnitesun, This is a little freer that my usual stilted style, Glad you liked it’s flow. Thank you, Mysteria, Your comments make me thin that is should be read, Perhaps I shall try it out loud. Thank you, GenXer, It’s always good to exercise the mind, I am pleased you enjoyed. Thank you, Zinsser, Hadn’t thought of it as freedom, But perhaps I do confine myself in forms. Still it’s how I write, Glad you found this breaking out to your liking Gloom |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
PF this is really wonderful read out loud, and if you don't mind (as you said before I was allowed and I always say who writes them and where they are from in the world) I shall do just that on Thursday to the seniors group and send you an email to tell you what they think LOL, their comments are very funny sometimes, ask Sunshine she really gets put through the wringer sometimes. Thanks again. Live today like it was your last day on earth! |
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